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03-19-03, 03:36 PM
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"Wishing On A Star" (Keystyle)
IP:
I know it's short but bear with me....
[3:40 p.m.] I'm at the pinnacle of greatness, and damn it, I'm bored; Ominous creatures test me, so I brandish the sword; I extirpate those that oppose the movement of me; The union of Kings, sent to destroy illusions of peace; My dreams are painted black, by my somber emotions; So many tears shed, it's like I'm the God of these oceans; Cast into eternal darkness......plod and corrosive; Thats the odd consequence of my squalid devotions; [3:42 p.m.] Holla back.... P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-19-03, 04:08 PM
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Got More Meds Than Pfizer
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IP:
nice... 2 min.. seems about right... good use of vocab off tha top, an' it flowed pretty well.... NE way can't really give an in-depth critique on such a short piece... uppin'
p.s. can u linx some feedback on my shit
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Authentik Intelligence
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03-19-03, 04:13 PM
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IP:
Thanx for the reply...I'll hit your shit up...
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03-19-03, 06:19 PM
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.-.Marxism.-.
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^^agree with blunt... was cool... next time your drop a keystyle... make it longer... anyways its another masterpiece from 13th... keep rhymin
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03-19-03, 07:05 PM
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IP:
^^^Thank you. I'ma take this key, and write to it, and make it a finished product, and re-post it soon....
P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-19-03, 07:11 PM
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Like Whoa...
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IP:
yeah, i thought that was dope.. exceptional for 2 mins. Agreed with blunt and inspire. I want to see the finsihed product.
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03-19-03, 07:18 PM
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IP:
^^^You will soon...gimme a day or two...finish it, and flush it out...
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03-19-03, 08:30 PM
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IP:
Good drop Apostle... although I piss longer than that... lol.. It had some good vocab for that short piece too plus some good lines. Dope... keep droppin
pz |
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03-19-03, 08:32 PM
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IP:
Good looks....
P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-20-03, 09:03 AM
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This was highly dope for such a short piece....I liked how it flowed thru....And tha message....Keep this up 13th....Peace
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03-20-03, 09:57 AM
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....:::-Punchline-:::....
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^^^^ said it all... |
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03-20-03, 03:37 PM
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IP:
^^^Thats about a freepost and a half...lol
Good Looks everyone.. P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-21-03, 12:22 AM
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IP:
I'm at the pinnacle of greatness, and damn it, I'm bored;
Ominous creatures test me, so I brandish the sword The first line said it all...the worst rhyme wasn't even written yet. Your style is tight...I feel it. |
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03-22-03, 12:48 AM
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IP:
Thank you....
P.e.a.c.e. |
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03-22-03, 08:03 PM
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IP:
your style is familiar ... so is your name actually.. very nice... short but sweet just like a resume... OoNnEe
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