yeah i'm white bitch so what/
I can tell your a faggot bitch you like your ass fucked/
quite referring me to a nigger i'm a cracka/
call me a nigger again and see hor fast i slap ya/
this whiteboy isn't joking he's on a mission/
to put ya ass in a submission, better pay attention/
put my hands around your throat and make ya ass gag/
laughing at ya ass because your shittin in a bag/
back in high school sniffing paint thinner/
you don't know how fuckin hard it is for a whiteboy to be an entertainer/
I know this one bitch she was so fuckin loose, it took her six dicks to get her in the mood/
not to be rude but you need to cut the diet shit trying to be slim bitch you wish/
keep eating them fuckin ho&ho's then your ass will be fatter than Anna Nichole Smith..

not a bad freestyle for someone startin out in this game ..
but some of rhymes didnt make sense .. example
put my hands around your throat and make ya ass gag/
laughing at ya ass because your shittin in a bag/
can an ass gag ?? i get wat ur meaning here but dont put things to rhyme just to rhyme, make sense with them and ur piece will be alot better.. flow was good, keep spitting though and looking foward to seeing ur new pieces
peace out...

THIS SHIT NEEDS WORK//

BUT GOOD ASS RYME TO START A SESSION//

GOOD SHIT BOY..

lol @ unifire... hahaha yeah i understand what you're trying to say but i think you read it wrong... anyways this rhyme was alright... even though some of it did seem just a little off and the Anna Nicole fat, slut and whatever else you can think of to make fun of her is played... but anyways keep rhymin

That's pretty impressive, buster ...

But, like the people above mentioned to you ... you definitely need some work.

i eat rappers like a flesh eating cannibal, u went from fuckin sluts to fuckin over weight animals, put it to ur face, u fuckin disgrace, keep talkin shit and im about to erase, u and ur 40oz takin E bitch, thats pretty sad non like u talkin shit, i never understand why these bitches thinkin there down, dont know how to clown, send them back to the pound, fuckin around .

umm.. ok

This was not good.

yeah i'm white bitch so what/
I can tell your a faggot bitch you like your ass fucked/
quite referring me to a nigger i'm a cracka/
call me a nigger again and see hor fast i slap ya/
this whiteboy isn't joking he's on a mission/

Nobody has a problem with his diction or message here? Hmm...

ima be honest man cuz its the only way u gonna get betta

this was WACK

The end is pissing me off he keeps on talking shit to my homie..you know what FUCK YOU.. ban me if you want I don't care i'm out.

peace

I believe that was wack... yea... Lots of work....

Hey Buster, don't let these people bring you down ...

I'm positive that if you keep working on it, you'll get better.

nah alee i'm not mad at the people, i'm just mad at "the end"

you suck... your rhyme sucks... but you can only get better.... keep elevatin'

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