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**a man walk into a darkened room and sits at a desk opposite another, dark figure**

man: ermmm, satan?

satan: **growls, eyes glow red**

man:errr yes, i was told you were prepared to answer a few question?

satan: **smiles evilly** go ahead

man: why pop?

satan: i had lower the standards of the earth/
this was a curse that keeps getting worse and for whats its worth/
it drains IQ like leeches through these movies that teaches/
that only the beautiful will achieve their reaches/

man: and nu metal?

satan: my special demons make money off teen angst/
it seems a mean prank when they walk to these banks/
make albums about their inner pain, telling you fibs/

man: we see the bullshit and these sinners gain on MTV cribs/ what about garage?

satan: commercial garbage specially for 12 year olds/
wannabes who act bold when their records are sold/
its my clone of hip-hop and i cackle at this/
coz everybody missed thart they cant rap for shit/

man: why the media?

satan: so false info is multiplied tenfold/
bullshit spreads faster than widows of menfolk/

man:sent to wars by the leaders, we call 'em the whip beaters/
bleed-us dry, tell us lies to restrain and defeat us/ and hard drugs?

satan: so far-shoved to melt brains of youngsters/
get the jones so bad its like they trained to punk-ya/
viens get punctured, until they hit prison/
and quit wishin or even hoping for a better life position/

man: and guns?

satan: my faveourite one, see it solves two problems/
one takes a death blow, the other goes to death row/
in the west, paranioa gets 'em locked and loaded/
and just waiting for burglers to knock, then unload-it/

man: finally, hip-hop?

satan: no, that was gods plan, to expand the narration/
verbal content presents clarity whatever the situation/
so now i'm sitting and waiting for my minions to rise/
in teeny-bopper disguise to stop hip-hopper guys/




:-) feedback? this aint fully finished yet.

Jonny that was superb. sorta like de la soul's bitties in the bk lounge. thats how the beat was in my head anyway. ya rhyme scheme top notch and ya vocab was on point aswell. like ya verse bout nu metal. lol u speak the truth. anyway check mine shinobi life. quite long but interesting i think.

ill, yo.. that was a sick story piece.. I couldn't follow the rhyme flow too good, but that's 'cause of the switching from person to person.. the content was the nicest part, I liked the concept with talking to satan.. uppin' 4-real..

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Yeah, this get's tha nod...cats don't have creativity anymore...good looks. Hey, check out my drop (tha paths...). It's worth it...could use your opinion.

uppin this once, cheers for the feedback fellas, much appriaciated.

oh shit, yo kid this had creativity all over it, yeah shit sounded like a skit from the lyricist loungue of something... shit was hot, had a good flow, the concept of it was pretty original, pretty dope, and the wordplay was there... keep that shit coming kid

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