After 9/11 the worlds been descendin, into a conflict/
exploding into iraq the search for osama was quick/
couldnt find him so on to the next prick,an international convict/
u all know his name sounds like so-dam insane/
a mentalist cares more for his oil while citizens are slain/
bush and blair strike but whats to gain?is it all in vain?/
saddam will use any means necessary to ward off defeat/
he has invisible weapons made underground away from the heat/
powers and murderous no doubt lets hope the soldiers can win before the light goes out/
evil weapons capable of mass destruction like a 'volcano' ready for eruption,bred from dictation and corruption/
the outcome is more dangerous than molten 'lava',poison gas and munitions from the Iraqi 'father'/
the people are the victims stuck in the 'middle', in the 'east' so poor barely able to afford a nibble/
they're like aliens in their homeland,no expression or freedom Husseins command/
the trouble is its an unprovoked attack by the US and UK,not backed by the UN not given the ok/
but bush and his lapdog hastened to war with no delay, not listening to the majority opinion and what they say/
but it's started now,stop it how?find the leader theres only 7 body doubles now/
hope this shit is finished before the people of iraq are diminished/
bodies pile up evolved from life to death inhaled their last breath/
innocent people like u and me difference is they no longer see/

let me know what u think
its a bit disjointed but it gets the point across

i really liked dis... fgee some ill ryhmes......

i really thought dis was ill good work...

Give us somefeed back on mine

FUCKEN HATERS.......is mine

peace fgee

ill shit yo...i was def feelin it....got the point across....stay up...1

daaam , i really, i honestly and think this is a masterpiece in your book or rymes my brotha//

dope , dopest shit i heard lately...

thanx man
keep the rhymes flowin.......

yo I liked what u was saying here, your against hussain and against the war, pretty decent anti-war verse... rhymes where aight, flow was a bit choppy, and vocab was straight... good shit man, good shit

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was nice dog, good drop, real deep, THE dopest shyt of the day * gives fgee the crown and sash with miss america crossed out and written dopest shyt of the day*

not bad, obvious topic that needs voicing... you pro'lly could've come across a little stronger, up the impact a little, you were using pretty generic analogys... "saddam will use any means necessary to ward off defeat/
he has invisible weapons made underground away from the heat/"... not an analogy but pretty basic vocab... I'm not at all say'n it isn't good, 'cause it is pretty tight, I'm just telling you how it could've been better... peace..

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yea i agree sum of ya points were a bit generalised about iraqs threat but i aint gonna start a debate on ere. still good to see u against the war. As for the actual piece it was nice quite a good flow but like ya said just a little disjointed. 7.5/10 check mine shinobi life aight peace

thats a deep meaning piece

i like the way you linked ideas in this, like this

u all know his name sounds like so-dam insane/
a mentalist cares more for his oil while citizens are slain/
bush and blair strike but whats to gain?is it all in vain?/

heavy piece...but try to use multis as i think multis can up the deepness

keep uppin

I like the perspective your piece took on the whole war issue. Fuck, there's way too much media propoganda as it is... and being that I study journalism, I wanna scream every time someone takes shit outa context. I didn't wanna scream at you. haha guess that's a good thing huh?

fav line: u all know his name sounds like so-dam insane