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Old 03-27-03, 07:59 PM   #1
G Unit
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something i needed to say

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yo yo what up
you keep picking on me cause i got a big head
at least i got clothes on my back and a roof over my bed
you go home hoping ur dads not drunk on the floor
but instead u find him fucking ur little sister up agaisnt the door
she fights with all her might to try to get away
but you say here dad pass her this way
you make fun of me cause i wear air force ones
its better than ur salvation army ones
you say the wrong thing to me your gonna find yourself in a bind
im gonna step up to you with all my 6 different types of nines
what do u think coming to my block rookie
ill beat you up so bad ull run home to ur mome asking to suck on her cookies
u think burning me is calling me rich
your the broke ass bitch whose living in a ditch
i aint afriad in basketball you might crosse me over
but i know ur terrified a black man might bend you over
what u gonna ryme something about shooting me
bitch u cant touch this im bullet proof cant u see
Ill bust a nut up in your mother
so how u fell about having another little brother
ill spit pharses that will thrill you
your nobody till somebody kills you
pyce

first ryme take it easy
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Old 03-27-03, 08:09 PM   #2
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yo dawg ur shit waz off the hook!!! itz funy as hell
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Old 03-27-03, 08:31 PM   #3
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yea G i will respect that. lol you do have a big head just playen jess peace out see you tommaarow
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Old 03-27-03, 08:38 PM   #4
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at least you used bars..made it easy to read...
your lines were played,the whole topic was played
pic something you think people could relate to and get into
cause i am tired of the "dont come to my block" verses
i guess some fools are feeling this though..i wasnt at all
but for a first rhyme it was aight....you need to work on
rhyme scheme and structure..even your lines out...
get creative and put a good deal of effort into your next drop
and please choose a good topic...some originality would help
keep droppin, and elevating....

~2~
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Old 03-27-03, 11:29 PM   #5
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Honestly....

lol
lol
lol
lol

How do you name your self after oe of the tghitest groups in hip-hop, and come with some off-the-wall shit like that? Funny as hell, mad hardly any sense, <if thats what you're aiming for, then i give it a 10/10...but if not, 4/10....

Keep at it....lol

P.e.a.c.e.
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Old 03-28-03, 11:56 AM   #6
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^hahaha i was thinkin' the same damn thing yo.. I was lol over that shit.......plz tell you ain't related to them niggas callin emsleves 50 cent and 12 cent on this site yo.

Anyways it was a lil on the ehhh (wack) side but oh well you'll learn.
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Old 03-28-03, 03:09 PM   #7
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yo for yuor first time it was decent but please chat bout sumthin real and your rymin needs work
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Old 03-28-03, 03:22 PM   #8
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YER MAN PHAT BUT 4REEL I TINK UR MORE OF A COMIC MC THAT SHIT MADE ME LAFF!!!

LIKE IT!
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Old 03-29-03, 06:22 PM   #9
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thanks lol ill ryme about a topic next time thanks for the advice
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