'In the doorway to deception, I find immaculate conception
For love is one big inception into my own misperception'


I gave up my own soul, I'll never become whole
facing reality's slowly takin its grave toll
the dice always roll, have I overshot?
with the cards that I've got
always stirrin the pot n' tempting fate to be caught
up in the lies, fearing goodbyes
while holding on tight to everything I despise
I always get shot down, runnin my mouth 'round
my ignorant pride's nailed my feet to the ground
thoughts forming sound, is it all in my head?
delluding everything said,
prevoking ego instead all I feel is the impending dread
of losing my grip, the words I let slip
carry a double edged sword with a suicide tip

Write me a love song, sing it to me
prove that we're not wrong, that we're meant to be
I'll give you forever, if you show me what's true
And I promise they'll never be anyone but you

I wanna hit re-wind, see what I might find
uncover fears I've hidden myself be-hind
inside my own mind, or was it just fate?
a case of love turned to hate
set to infuriate and overcompensate
for all of the pain, goin insane
only to find I've got nothing to gain
I've always been so wrong, singin this low song
constantly searching out somewhere to be-long
it was here all along, why couldn't I see?
behind my negativity,
simplicity in everything I wanted to be
but now with nothingness faced, opportunity laced
seems I've finally got my personality traced

Writing my own song to sing just for me
don't care if its all wrong, I'm finally free
taking my forever, to myself I am true
and I promise I'll never again give into you

this was aight but just a bit simple. I couldnt really work out wat u were rappin about but the flow worked in most places. ya vocab was mad simple tho u need to up that defo. still not bad. anyway check mine shinobi life aight peace

well i liked the peice, it had meening, since i dont know you, and alled you dogg earleir i tried to find your gender from this, its prolly female, but there were ssome masculinly used word, insane, and such, but off he gender subject, i liked your peice it was tru, these are the type i like, songs telling a story

good job, 8/10 [ only cuz when there r alotta multies in the beggining it draws my attention away]

nice concept, a bit dark but original in that sense. a little simple and poetic but worth the read.

keep posting.

haha yes...I'm a girl.

oh snap....a girl...i thought it was very well written