http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...3367#post333367

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...3370#post333370

yeah i stole this concept off tupac and the album "all eyes on me", so shoot me i thought it was a cool idea.

i heard your first time was at 14/
i guess you must've been sore when you became a whore-queen/
i watched you from a distance cursing like a truck driver/
the furthest thing from a lady, fellas all up inside-ya/
in fact, i almost felt a twang of guilt/
i heard your pops would let you play to you hilt full tilt/
passing condoms to the new man, telling him to take-care/
like he was your pimp, thats a tough break-there/
its not your fault that your minds so slow/
and karma caught up to you with time you know/
i think you were 15 when we heard the news/
you were knocked up by some fool, guess it was due/
so what then? you dropped out, hit the dole, got a house/
put a ring on your finger and got you a spouse/
your foul mouths still running and your heads still thick/
and you wonder why they call you bitch.....

you was a good friend, had my back til the end/
someone on who i could depend/
remember when you hit me for no reason, you were scheming/
i beat you til you were bearly breathing/
little bitch, still talking about me? faggot, shout-me/
i put this into words in case you doubt me/
see, i can sort out all the men from bitches/
and you little scrawny fuck always had me suspicious/
kid, you on the pull more than milk-maids, am i missin something?/
bet theres skeletons in your cloest, in the night bumpin'/
you desperate to be humpin', in fact its disgusting/
i see the ugly chicks you approaching and hoping/
they expose your facade like "oh my god"/
"we was grindin' on the dancefloor, he still aint hard"/
in fact, i'll just get you a dress, you can perform the switch/
and you wonder why i call you bitch.../

unfinished, feedback?

umm, it was ok the flow was aight, the multies wernt forced, i dont see any tupac, i geuss it may have been awhile since i heard that album, 7/10

could u peep do you know [addictions] for me, and a lil feed back?

Since I'm a girl...its mad disturbing. But hell, pieces are supposed to make you feel shit right?

disturbing? what piece were you reading? these were both true stories, and i agree the mutlis were kind of forced actually.....im not happy with this piece..... which is why it aint finsihed yet

I guess you know your stuff...It's still better than most of these raps I'm readin'...this site is fulla wack cats that have to take tha pacifier out of their mouth just to speak on your piece...keep flowin'...they'll know in the end...Check my piece (Elements)...peace!

this was alright, good concept

this was a pretty standard piece by your own hight standards johnny. it was nice and as much as this sorta topic just bores me u handled it well. cant say i saw the 2pac style but i aint neva been that much of a pac head anyway. ya flow was good and ya rhyme schemes were simple but they worked. ya vocab was aight too. anyway check mine return the favour

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=35519

aight peace