yo this is part of a song Im workin on
cant come up with a decent hook tho
so if u guys have any suggestions I would appreciate it



I teleport this rhyme outta my mind into my pad/
to reveal the secrets I never had/
when I spit you freeze/
then I drop kick your fuckin knees/
"Fatality, Flawless Victory"/
follow me as I sing, as I lead/
you to your fuckin doom with deep and complicated shit like/
the pencil to led to pen-soul to blood-red/
to superhuman strength in my muthafuckin head/
with my x-ray vision/
I see thru the dillusion you've hidden, Ive written/
pages with out physically touching anything/
only doing it mentally, you fuck with me/
Ill kick your ass like POW!/
BANG!, KAZOO!, and WOW!/
NOW sound baloons/
are runnin rampant like BOOM! BOOM!/
this storm of words is lightning and verbs/
raining metaphors to bring towers to curbs/
slowly destroyin' the earth/
backwards, like death to birth, last to first/
I know it hurts to hear my curse/
I write like a spectre/
intangible, invisible/ like Hannibal Lectar
my words trick you to eat you to consume your soul/
ca'lear my throat/ *ahem*/
I rap so rapid I cant stand still/
at best Im jitter'n, the ink is sizzlin'/
'cuz my letters are hotter then/
a Sahara porn set with Shakira fuckin' Salma Hayek/
ramblin' like a psychotic psychic/
thinkin (whispers) "chaos, chaos, cause a riot/
why not try it", jump off a building and fly like I did/
put acetate in your pupils to incinerate your eyelids/
but the again you just might shoot lasers out your cornea/
Im warning ya/
my lines are so powerful that when I speak its so unspeakable that its deplorable/
these words arent durable/
they're invincible, immortal/
to live forever/
Im so smart Im no longer clever/
five levels above the highest level/
so why am I gettin judged by rappers that fuckin suck/
4 outta 10 my fuckin nuts/
anyways Im here to rule again/
strikin' fear into the hearts of villians, its Super Hooligan/

lol nick, seriously you need to get my number and we can record some of your shit, its got me laughin.

thx dogg, we definately need to
pm or e-mail me later
just click on my name for all the info
or Ill talk to u later at school
holla atcha boi

nice bro...
your unstoppable
mad uppins

tight work stay up

thx for uppin
i appreciate it

This was tha tighest verse I have seen you post, straight up...I like these linez if I had to choose:

this storm of words is lightning and verbs/
raining metaphors to bring towers to curbs/
slowly destroyin' the earth/
backwards, like death to birth, last to first/
I know it hurts to hear my curse/

LOL, had me dyin'...as for a hook, give this one a try:

You'll stand Dazed in a stupor...It's Hooligan, Super...
Blazin' on troopers...who dare to mark tha path...
Tha sharpest shooter...with tha smartest computer...(brain)
Bow amazed at tha ruler...'cause they can't compete tha staff...(mic)

Hey how about check out my joint (Elements)...give me some feedback...

this was alright... i wasnt really feeling it but i have to admit it was better than 99% of the stuff on here... everything seemed to be on point... nothing but praise shooting from my way... keep rhymin

hey thx a lot for uppin
and thx Tha Linez Drawn for the hook
I might end up usin it

uppin

for commentin on my shit this shit is weak. dont be a hyprocrite