here i sit and i spit not givin a shit
reachin out to all ma niggas that are down with it
unfamilia mc's all throwin a fit
take a break from my rhymes, let em recover a bit
whos the shit, that'd be me
its easy to see,
im the illest mafucker to be - straight from the "P"
im playin tha game
my shits definin' ma name, its ashame
that all you mothafuckas keep soundin the same, i'd complain
but then i'd waste...... all a ma breath
then i'd seep it from a nigga till he had none left
put to rest, im the best
mc that you'll see,
got this phat ass blunt - and its rolled just for me.... wait and see
while im up on that level
my words'll crack a weak nigga - send em home wit tha devil,
i revel... wit a 8-ball a dope,
take this rail mafucka watch me laugh while you choke - its a joke
you cant handle... the shit that im bringing
you spun mothafucka.. my shits got you swingin
what happened to those rhymes yo bitch said you were slinging?
now im clingin.... to tha side a yo hos
your shits snappin an crackin - im up unda their clothes
now exposed... shit dawg, i didn't mean to impose
are you pissed, is that it, cause im hittin yo shit
your da one wit tha ho's that slipped an fell on my shit - on with it
im still quick - fast lips n fly shit....
now come on mothafucker get your tricks of ma dick

Wow, this is getting slept on... good thing you came to us...

This was alright flow wise but other than that... no...

my shits definin' ma name, its ashame
that all you mothafuckas keep soundin the same, i'd complain
but then i'd waste...... all a ma breath

^I couldn't have said it any better. You followed right along with every other emcee that has graced RB. I don't think I could name 1 emcee that HASN'T rapped about them being the illest at some point in their whole rapping life. I did it. I'm wasting my breath by telling you not to do this because this is what newbies do b/c you are already a statistic... just come more original next time and put some more thought into what you right about. Come up with a story line or something that has more excitement... and for future reference... don't let it be a bank robbery... everyone has done that too.

pz

thanks for the comments man... helped out a lot... and now that i've been runnin around on different freestyle sites i completely understand what your talkin about - thanks again

peace