when, when will this shit end
when will it end, bout how i depenend
on these fony ass friends
its like the message is on its way
but yo i havent pushed send
in my head im goin crazy, oceans explode
im sittin here just waitin on the next episode
a yo i cant win, in this never endin fight
like im standin on the sun
but yo i cant see no light
im sick of it, i need to go and stand up
i kno the answer to the question
and im puttin my hand up
or do i, do i really kno,
or am i answerin the question
just for the show
i kno one thin, im this close from givin up
my whole life i been workin
no time to be livin it up
im a cut my wrists wit one little sliver
the postman is here, my death has just been delivered
this is it, i fall to my knees, look up to the sky,
in a breif second i watch my life fly by my eyes
but no i get up, my death is a return to sender
im stonger than that, i aint goin surrender
i got a hole in my heart, when will it mend
questions in my head, when will it end.........

c'mon yall if u read this, hit me back, yall sleepin r what?

soilder22

nice topic dogg, the flow seemed off in some places or maybe i just didnt see it? but still it was aight, elevate with the vocab and the piece coulda been alil better still was good.. keep spittin
peace out...

this is a nice verse, good metphors. It seemed like you repeated yourself at parts, and sometimes the repetitions didn't fit very well.
peace

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she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

thx 4 writin, ill work on fillin in sum spots, keep writin

soilder22

what yall sleepin or what c'mon hit me back

soilder