I slice u with a Machette//Concave yo back//Cuz dis g is Reddy//
pop u up like a hackysack//I spit vicious//At all of u bitches//stop lookin suspicious// And u wont get all of deez disses//I grant u three wishes// so u wont miss this//Cuz i bound 2 get physical//
and lyrical//spittin words at yo dimensional//if it doesnt fit you//then ima split you// like Yoshimistu// And when i kill i wont miss you// Ill reuse u//like a tissue//Put u in da daily obitual//thats a ritual// and if its an issue//then im glad thats the end of u//And u still talkin, i'll put the words back in you// cuz ill leave u shook like a box of shake and bake// like and earthquake that hit to make ya bones break//cuz i come from the "School of Hard Knocks''// makin ya confuse like a fool// thats why i put the "Hard Knocks of School" in you.. Im thorough//And what i tell you stop following guides// u makin me take all your pride// that u thought u had inside//

yo that was pretty tight but just a few pointers u gotta have a lil better wordplay....longer lines...and some of tha shit u say doesnt really make sense i aint hatin im just tellin u some shit but other than that it was good son

yeah youve definetly elevtedsinc i last peeped your post,jus ton ething id like to mention,youve got some real nicw words you can be using in there but throwing them away for smaller ones,ex.
ill pop you like a haystack...that line id follow with something rhyming with haystack,not vicous,...and this one,spittin words at your dimension,i thoughtj this was a tight line right there,but agian you misused it with the word you on the next line,i thnk dimension is jsut an ill word to start off with for osme reason,try using these bigger words your leaving out in your rhymes,itd be heaps mad sounding and alot nicer,but no biggie im just pointin out,tryin to help an all,keep spittin an delevate your already on your way...bismillah
salaam aleh koom

you suck!!!