checkit/
tears drop outta tha mic/
and I find, Im not as strong, as I thought I was, in my mind/
and its sad.......bein stuck in this desolate spot/
cuz Im caught between livin life and livin it not/
ex-bitch is fuckin this faggot or-not*/
and I dumped her ass so why the fuck does it bother me/
jedi renegade or foresaken emcee/
lone ranger cryin' with my mic beside me/
no longer rappin lightly/
Im bringin this shit right outta my bones/
outta my soul and straight outta my throat/
I been in love with the-same-thing* for many* years/
* barely reckognizes me and it draws tears/
from my heart, from my pen, from this mic/
but never once from my eyes cuz I keep it bottled up inside/
but it leaks out...and I cry/
and I cry and again like a man I cry/
want it* like* a wife, want it* as* my life/
but only got it* in this mic/
and this mic is my rhyme and I write to find/
the truth in me/
fuck wordplay and fuck vocabulary/
fuck rhyme scheme/
cuz the purity is found only in its simplicity/
so this is me writin' "Dear Diary"/
Im transformin my heart thru muscles/
to veins to nerve impulses/
to twitches to pen to ink to lines to rhyme/
to one open mic to open my mind/
if I had a penny for every time I wrote 'bout u/
Id be richer then Bill Gates and Donald Trump too/
but its the same thing over and over again/
round and round I go/
chasin' my fuckin tail, I dont even know/
what the fuck Im doin anymore/
just stuck with this lonely mic cuz I am The Lonely Mic/
and thats all folks/
and thats all.


*= changes I made cuz it came out too personal

This piece was very hot, i liked it alot,
the flow went well wid the topic
rhyme stucture was ok,
vocab was a lil off,
but this piece had a lot of feelin so i liked it lot
real nice dawg

uppin for 2 more posts

uppin
I will return the favor

str8 fromt he heart dogg, thats all that matters
like u say fuck all tha other shit man long as its from tha heart then its good in my book

yea dog from the heart good drop, i love ur sig too, all the quotes and shit, right before i came to this i was werkin a verse in my head exactely to this subject i meen right before i read this i was werkin the lines lol, so dont call it copy cuz i was thinkin it before i read it, good drop ^^^^^^^^^^^^^

thx for uppin
Ill be sure to check out ur next drop

that was a 'ill spit, it was hot, easy to follow, i like the fact its cumin from ur heart, and ur gettin shit off ur chest, well i think u put ur point across really good, if u were to put sum more work on it, u could make it a whole song, think about it,

and its sad.......bein stuck in this desolate spot/
cuz Im caught between livin life and livin it not

fo sum reason that line had me shook son. man you pretty much killed it on this one, shredded that shit. i like the style. "idont give a fuck" renegade shit. shit was hot yo. you got ability man.

thx a lot for the responses
i appreciate it

uppin one last time

I dont know why im even doing this, Ill grab your fucking face and wack it with a pool stick, and if you call me out then do it with pride, cause after im done with you you wont have any inside

hell is asian dudes that think their cool, hell is fat people swimming in pools, hell is you guys think you can battle, but im jumpin in you like you was a boat and starting to paddle.

everybody listen this is the firecracker, emcees dont like me cause im known to retire rappers, so you got the skills and you say you got the flows, but that shit isn't real like a kid with 14 toes, laugh go ahead cause that was supposed to be funny, I'll blast you with my rythmes till your nose starts running, and after that I'll myself under your skin, wack you in the top of your head and out pops your chin.

what the fuck?