His outrageous thoughts, rage in phrases that amazes gods//
Contagious bars, engraved in faces, what the cases caught//
Disgraced n scarred by what they brought wit a graceful art//
His name will mark, so dope he will reply with a caustic remark//
The race is lost, he's got mo' hateful costs than racist cops//
With every drop, get maimed n tossed inta basement vaults//
Drawin with his faults, he hits unexpected like predicting tommorrow//
When he spits you get sprayed, filled wit sorrow, feelin layed in burrows//
His inner darkness turns elements into burned sediments//
Journalists inta churned venison, urn buries 'em after he learns veterans//
His morbid forces force the orbit of your core forward//
A metamorphisis of four horses hault for the joyful chorus//
His blows will throw ya, bolt ya throat off your shoulders//
Hold ya whole soul in horror, Sodom n Gomorra, hittin it lower//
Life's a whore he proposed to n bore more sorrow//
Like he was supposed to, Drew swords sworn as the globes hollow//

He birthed horizons, bringin lines that searched for violence//
To get mo' solid points like fights at knife fests, He rehearsed the nicest//
His verses collided inside of minds wit an unheard of silence//
For the answers, he searched his iris, .... kaniving//
He even ruled out the cross like church n tryants//
First shall be last when, he lightens down our loads like attachments//
Transactions of sinful actions, keepin tabs then add the taxes//
With the Word of God, he stabs the masses, acid rappin//
Revelation of our Genesis our past is backwards, It just happens//
All that is in your hands collapses, all your tasks get snatched then to blame//
You're found a flacid hapless captive, baskin in hell's matches the flames call your name//
Jailed wit all your dames n each day you find out that it's all the same//
Dismayed in all your shame n fo each sin said in each sick phrase your jaw is maimed//
Cryin out 'Oh God' insane, hopin it's just a phase, the demons touch your face//
As you look to the heavens n see throats erupt in praise//
Metaphors he borrows from the depths of God's tourso//
Stays packed like Warsaw, he did it coz he thought so//

Damn Herbs Are Everywhere These Days

Writing All These Herbish Scripts..

Bah..

LoL...I Liked This, Remind Me Of My Old Style..

It was good. Keep it up and thanks for all the help on the boards.

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Iznt this homo jimmy's bitch?... jus wundrin, not beefin...

Yo i liked this alot great similes used, and nice flow

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DAMN THIS SHIT WAS NICE


''drawin with his faults, he hits unexpected like predicting tommorrow//
When he spits you get sprayed, filled wit sorrow, feelin layed in burrows//
His inner darkness turns elements into burned sediments//
Journalists inta churned venison, urn buries 'em after he learns veterans//


damn ^^^ whoa flames right there maybe me and you should collab sometime eh

yeah, i think it was pretty good

Great Vocabulary, Good word play and it had a nice flow to it. OoNnEe

it was tight son word

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very nice. great vocab and wordplay. i really liked this alot. keep spittin dude.

could you peep my shit?http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=39624

not bad.. I've seen way better.. but not bad.. I liked some of the multies you had, but others didn't go with the flow too well..
you started the rhyme really tight..
His outrageous thoughts, rage in phrases that amazes gods//
Contagious bars, engraved in faces, what the cases caught//
Disgraced n scarred by what they brought wit a graceful art//

but didn't end it too well

As you look to the heavens n see throats erupt in praise//
Metaphors he borrows from the depths of God's tourso//
Stays packed like Warsaw, he did it coz he thought so//

^ that didn't flow at all really...

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this was disease...enjoyed readin this one...similies was nice (first thin gi look for in a rhyme besides metas)...clever wordplay in this too..nice drop...wahid