Part II of my slept-on piece "...Broken...", this one ain't as long... check it...

We dated, separated, then I waited so long for your return,
all the time that I was missing you it burned,
nights I couldn’t sleep man I just tossed and I turned…
I felt helpless, till you helped us,
now this joy is so tremendous,
cause you rendered... you affection,
and in minutes you diminished my frustration,
now these feelings that you're giving once again cause inspiration...
Now I’m done with all this chocking,
yeah I said my heart was broken,
but I’m standing here just holding...
all the pieces like a puzzle,
as we put them back together with no hustle,
and I’m pleased it came to this past all the tussles…
I was blind but now I see,
so let the light shine on me,
not caged with rage man I’m free,
as you can obviously see,
as I express audibly…

See back when I headed, to feeling pathetic,
it’s like I shredded, that sweeter,
you gave me for the cold weather,
but now we sow it together… once more,
you see with these metaphors,
man I intend to explore,
all the feelings that got me so sore,
and the feelings that made my heart soar,
yeah this is something that I cannot ignore…
This is it girl a blessing,
no doubt I learned a touch lesson,
through painful depth of full sessions,
emotions can be a weapon…
and if it’s wrongfully handled,
the shit can turn right against you,
therefore I gottah just thank you…
my baby, my lady,
see part of you helped to save me,
when I was going so crazy,
when I was feeling lunacy,
so now what’s left is to praise thee,
your help has brought me to safety…

It gottah be how it was then,
we can’t pretend to just be friends,
I don’t intend to let this end,
cause your love will help the growth to my new stem…
See it grows, like a budding rose,
freely willing it was not imposed,
and I suppose it comes to those,
who felt the pain but then proposed,
to once again give it a go,
and as it goes, this path I chose,
will fill the spot a heart just loathes…
Cause we’re together I’m wired,
to whatever your heart desires,
and as long as there’s for me then we can both retire,
to whatever your soul requires…
This joy is rapidly getting faster,
will it be happily ever after?
just actually never drastic,
is aptly all that I’m asking,
just ask me man I’ll be basking,
in all the glory, just straight relaxing,
cause I’m not lonely now strongly clasping,
to what is lovely, that’s all that’s happening…

Thanx for reading y'all

damm, I hope this one doesn't get slept on to

I liked this one also.. a good story you told there... I hope people dont sleep on this one either .. OoNnEe

Alias are you from Rhode Island, Cause a kid i know goes by that name. and your styles are similar.

yeah thanx...
oh yo, nah... I ain't from rhode island... I moved from newark to CT... and yo... what'd u think of this post?

one word: cute

one problem: i couldn't tell if this was a slow beat hip-hop/rap song.. or a r&b classic, maybe that's just me -- reguardless i liked the post

and in minutes you diminished my frustration,
now these feelings that you're giving once again cause inspiration...


i like the flow on these lines
this is a tight personal piece
i never read the first one but i wish i had
cuz this is really good

PS return the favor
reply to my "Foresaken Emcee" or my "The Lonely Mic"
thx

thanx man... yeah I'll get to one of your posts soon... peace

those lines hooligan mention i felt too,shit was a tight drop alias,ima go check out the other,nice peice foreal,skills...propz.
bismillah

Nice....verse..i wus feelin it contend nice

peep mine

~my Thoughts As A Man~

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