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Old 04-17-03, 04:37 PM   #1
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HiTLeR oF mY HeArT

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An inequality which cannot be lesser than,
greater than or equal to
a verb that doesn't show action
a word which is never spoken
an amino acid who cannot find its match
a story which is never told
a legend no one praises
This is my life

The meeting of your eyes
prolongs my despise
Here I am sitting confused
stuck in this game of lies, despise and every cries

He has become the Hitler of my heart
The one of which I cannot part
All your notes, letters and gifts
are now just reminders of my everyday pain

I know I should act, but instead I stand stift
Like nothing happened you walk away
Why can't I just do the same?
I know these feelings and emotions won't last forever
so I'll move on
And when you come running back I'll just say, "whatever, so long"

Being lonely isn't fun
looking out the window on to the bright yellow sun
Thinking of you every moment of the day
Why can't these feelings just float away?
If they did I wouldn't care but instead tell the next victim to beware
How did you...
become so untrue?
How you think
when I can't even blink?
I won't waste my words any longer
cause I know this will only make me stronger

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Old 04-18-03, 02:43 PM   #2
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I don't get it. Well... I do get it... but I don't. Did you know that Hitler's first name, Adolph, is a contraction of the two German words, Noble and Wolf?

The jew in me says I should be offended. But the jew in me also says I should swim through a lake of urine for a few pennys.

But the poet in me understands what you're trying to say. About how much hurt and pain and torture a person can feel. In this case, that person is you.

It sucks to hurt.

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Old 04-18-03, 07:21 PM   #3
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my bad about that...i didnt mean to offend any1 about the title of my poem....its just the only reason i put hitler of my heart its just because...hitler as a dictator is like the same thing as the guy i used to date...he's the one who tells me what to do and to feel what to feel like somehow i dont know what to do ...

I am sorry if i offended u in some way but i just want you to know that i didnt mean to....ill try to think about what am i gonna say before i post thangs up
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Old 04-18-03, 07:49 PM   #4
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Yo you didnt offend nobody i guess but i think this piece had alot of emotions in it.......contend just nice.....nice one shiz

peep mine

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Old 04-18-03, 11:10 PM   #5
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This isnt offensive... She wasn't glorifying Hitler, or anything close to it. I thought the title of your poem served its purpose well Shiznit, and I liked the poem overall. Keep up the good work.
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Old 04-19-03, 01:26 AM   #6
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thanks end....i really aint know i was gonna offend someone bout this...but thanks a lot....next time imma watch my words...
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Old 04-19-03, 08:10 PM   #7
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On the offence thing, it depends on the reader...Necro had his reasons to take offence (well kind of)..whilst others didn't...but it's apparent in so much 'art'...so it's all good in one way or the other..

...the piece was strong, you came simple, strong and raw...i actually felt you used 'Hitler' kind of well..cos of what you understand of him, you relate to and draw comparisons with your boyfriend...

...nice piece, resp...

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Don't need to choose your words more carefully, as long as it's within context and not stupidifingly non relative....this piece was neither of those things i mentioned....
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Old 04-19-03, 11:23 PM   #8
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Bah, I should be the one to apologize. I said I should be offended, but I'm not offended. Because I understand the context you were using it in. (It's just that there is this national conspiricy of hasidic jews who control the entertainment industry and try and censor all references of anti-semitism.)

If it is any consilation, Jerry Sienfeld is jewish and he has used one too many Nazi jokes on his show.
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Old 04-20-03, 05:12 PM   #9
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its straight necro...i just aint want ppl to get offended with just my writing...as much as possible..im making my shits more about life as my own...but...yeah...dont need to apologize...i know what u mean....i feel yah in some ways...

thanks for the replies....
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Old 04-22-03, 06:05 AM   #10
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The jew in me says I should be offended. But the jew in me also says I should swim through a lake of urine for a few pennys.



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