People say / that I was fake / told me i never saw a gun / never had to run / wasn't anyone / but / what i speak is the turth / and nothing of it / so shove it / they don't know me / i'll always tell them that / then they / all turn there backs / laugh / cuz they new / i was right / always getting in fights / makeing the best of / this life /


Errr i think that one was bad but whateva Ya'll can IM me at BuffyAngelLover1
Oh yea people call me Kris or Kristen Or Kool-aid as you can see from my signature

try to have longer lines, and split them up so that it's like:
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you had an okay topic, and if you added vocab and actual complete thoughts in there, this would've been an okay rhyme.
Keep it up
peace

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