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Old 04-24-03, 11:13 AM   #1
Whytpac
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Fries wit dat

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Fries wit dat?

K, so I hurt my one Friend
Now’s all I can do is hope we will not bend
Cause I lied and stole
Now im an asshole
but I can't change that can't go back
But now im just prayin that he will forgive and take me back
See cause me and him have been down for a long long time.
Cause of him I started 2 ryme
& me in him will be bro’s forever
& if don’t trust me soon then he may never
But see it wasn’t like, I didn’t consider his feelings
its just that my love for her hit the ceiling
And I was done lying and Hiding
But 2 the rules I was not abiding
They say bro’s before hoes and I gone and Screwed that And I went behind my tru bros back.
So right now thigh forgive me for this lie I mean I messed up.
Way up cause it finally hurts you
But its not all me that does this 2 ya and this is tru
So homes forgive me for goin behind your back and tell me honestly we still like fries and a Big Mac, yup like Kobe and Shaq. ite?

2 a bro i fucked over
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Old 04-24-03, 02:30 PM   #2
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Was what it was...

...as it was a venting piece, no real critique...but depicted raw, but not executed as well as it could've been (oh well, i guess there was some after aall)(..

...resp...
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Old 04-24-03, 03:00 PM   #3
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yeah. The venting works... so it's ridiculous to finetune at this point.
But I'd say that it is a good self-examination -- or start to one anyway.
...that's the good thing about being a writer....you can act, write and realize you were wrong. You beat yourself up a bit in this one so I'd say you should examine both relationships...
a bro is a bro.... but a heart is a heart...
just don't get your dick mixed up with your heart.

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Old 04-26-03, 05:43 PM   #4
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if i was ya friend i would stomp a mud hole in ya ass for fucking my girl. Then you want to offer me fries an a shake ya right .Ill fucking fry ya rotten carcuss then shake ya ashes on the filthy whores crotch for cheating on me .then u have da fucking nearve to say its not all me dat does this to ya.if i was ya friend it will be bros before hoes an bullet holes for snake bros.you 2faced fucker.
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