tell me wat y'all think

Time Line

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time time time, it go's by but people still do dye
time time time, it go's by and you don't know why
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Time go's by and still I cry fo you//
try to bury feeling so I smoke a blunt or two//
so yea I'm asking why its got ta by like this//
my heart go's out to your dad and sis//
all I need is one wish, one wish//
whys god got ta keep serving up this cold ass dish//
so I'll play your tunes one more time//
I hope that why're gona be just fine//
I know its selfish but I gots ta be//
one day we'll meet again and crack open a beer just you and me//
only 19 what a waste of so much potential//
staying true its wat you got ta do its essential//
I'm fighting holly demons in the mental//
Time go's by and I know why//
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time time time, it go's by but people still do dye
time time time, it go's by and you don't know why
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its a work in progress I'm working on the other two they be posted later so tell me wat y'all think.

aight my imput is isn't takin ikely most of the time but check it this post has a lot of potential the problem is you stopped too soon you may want to go finish this verse and then edit this i can't say too much on it not enough there but what is there is good so just keep doin what you're doin and add a little more, talk more on who ever it is you wrote this on like how or why they died and what not get creative with some storytellin aight

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even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

dead in middle of little of little italy
little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun