verse 1:
all this Pain-that-i'm-feeling is gotta be an Illusion/
i'm suffering-in-an-eternal-darkness , gettin overshadowed by tha Rest/
But someday i know that I will be Compared to the Best/
Intellegent , Indust Mandatory when i hit ya all wit tha Lyrical Statement/
gettin Overpowered by the Different Endorsements/
this External NightMare is Killin Me ,its so unbelievable that i'm Dealin wit it/
but i "pray-to-god" to help me overcome tha Means and Odds/
I feel like tha whole world is Breaking Apart/
we gotta luv one and other wit all our Heart/
and Join hands while we're kneeling down and prayin to tha almighty Man wit tha Crown/
this World is Surround wit stupidy , hatred , romance and immunity/
sometimez i feel like God dont love me/
sometimez he makes bad things like killings happen to me/
but i still Luv em/
wit these Acoustic rhymez i'm truly expressing how i'm Feelin/

chorus:
this is my life/
sometimez i pray at night/
askin god to help me/
cause i feel like i'm drownin/
send your blessinz down while ur tears is fallin/

verse 2:
keep my Hopes Alive , cause one day I wont be Alive/
but i'm a Survive , wish that all my dead Friendz could Revive/
even though ya all are dead , da memories will alwayz be in my Head/
i wish that i could have been taken away instead/
but when i look ahead , i see my beautiful future/
but for now i'm a try ta reach ya/
getting blessed by tha father up above ya/

chorus:
this is my life/
sometimez i pray at night/
askin god to help me/
cause i feel like i'm drownin/
send your blessinz down while ur tears is fallin/

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That was nice. The second verse was pretty short...it could be worked on a bit. I like the hook (chorus)...the whole thing was felt deep. The second verse, even though it was short, gave me a good picture. It's emotional...no bull shyt-in
peaz. keep up the writtin'.

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