im a virgo give me the mic and let me flow// mt vibes will flow from your head to your toe//how many muthafuckers will come to my show and how many muthafuckers will give me there doah//What?// so you aint feeling my flow//is dat a yes or no// you dont think so//please take your possesions and go//so No your not leaving next u'll b pleding thinkin ur acheiving more than me but you never will// u'll never be better than me cos im L'J an Im here to stay i aint somehting that will fuckin die away cos im gonna rap an rap til the dieing day...
^^^^^^^one of my first raps when i started ..back then my name was LJ (Lil'Jules)

this was in the other topic but if u didnt see it here its again
yo
have you ever imitated your favourite rapper through a mirror and learned thier lyrics too?
Well there aint nuffin too be ashamed off cos ive been there and done it too. What am I saying i stll fucking do.
We all have dreams and hopes for the future. Ive wanted to be a rapper for longer than I can remember. Never had any info on managers or record labels, i knew there was a slight chance I could make it.
I needed to learn how to spell so of coarse i had to go to school. Fuck I thought I was the coolest MC, every thursday last two we'd have PE.
I love pe so I'll choose it for my GcSe. Thats my other option if I dont make it on TV I could further my career in Pe.
I want to teach anything to those kids If its from protecting them from the streets or learning them the beats.
Nobody knows how hard it is to go on stage. They give you a mic to do what you like. as long as I get my words out i think I'll be doin alright.
Cos we all have dreams and picnic scenes but it seems to me I cant make my scene. I dont know what i sound like or look like to you but i swear evey thing I say Its all fucking true.I aint the type to wear dressy clothers or jewellery.
Im mean when I say fuck the queen it just what the fuck has she ever done for me?
I was born to be a rapper not a fucking singer. Nope im not form pop Idol . This rap games no fairytale weather your male or female. you got to work from the bottom to get to tha top....


if u could coment on these d be grateful

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I like the concept.. rhyme was lacking.. stick with being a Pe teacher.. nah j/k.. you need to work on vocab and delivery of your lines.. the ideas were good but not communicated in a clear way.. work on those aspects, delivery is a mayjor part of flow..

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it was straight but it could be better

I think this ryhme was Aiight keep it up girl