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Old 05-07-03, 06:18 PM   #1
EaZy M
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tell me what you think please!!!! its my first actually kinda ryhming rap so yea give me some credit.

eh you check it/
im the new cat on the block with the styles perfected/
im ready to blow like a cock thats been erected/
for far too long...im too healthy to be infected/
with this bullshit ya'll spittin/
take a close look at what ive written/
burn your eyez then make you take a shit n/
remember what you saw written/

some ask me why it took so long for me come ..well im here i came/
the names Easy M N/
im just givin ya'll what youve been cravin/
this rap shit im savin make a spot for me to etch my name in/ peace....
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Old 05-07-03, 06:18 PM   #2
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feedback please
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Old 05-07-03, 06:31 PM   #3
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loved the openign lol
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Old 05-07-03, 06:36 PM   #4
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er ah............that wasnt that good. Just work on your vocab and I'm sure you'll do better.
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Old 05-07-03, 07:02 PM   #5
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I Like that first rhyme also, but besides that, it needs work. No better than i can do though.
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Old 05-07-03, 07:06 PM   #6
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jus ya first post.....it was aight i guess.....r u white?......no hate jus yo styles off a lil bit......cant do nothin bout that though.....up yo vocab and you need to play wit ya words......
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Old 05-07-03, 09:18 PM   #7
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im the new cat on the block with the styles perfected/
im ready to blow like a cock thats been erected/
for far too long...im too healthy to be infected/

^^^^Illest lines , , ,, but tha rest were whack
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Old 05-07-03, 10:03 PM   #8
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alright ill work on it i got one posted in imfumuz tryouts so go check that one out otherwise if i get to it ill post it here(much better)
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Old 05-07-03, 10:13 PM   #9
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IT WAS OK.
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Old 06-17-03, 07:43 PM   #10
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it was prolly better than i would but it could use some work, keep playinw/ stuff aight............................................. .................................................. ..................
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Old 06-17-03, 07:56 PM   #11
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YUK
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Old 06-17-03, 11:13 PM   #12
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im the new cat on the block with the styles perfected/
im ready to blow like a cock thats been erected/
for far too long...im too healthy to be infected/

hahahaha nearly spat out my breakfast, funny lines my man

but nah listen to the experienced ones, dun worry bout poeple sayin it sucked ass just up ur vocab n keep postin ur shit, first lines showed u got sumthin there to use tucked away, keep goin man
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