Better than the first? Give me some feedback

I see people dying, for no reason, people actin stupid makin people diceased and, it aint worth it, to sacrifice your life for drugs and hoes, cars, clothes and doe. You see, I knew guy that carried guns around, only 14 then, now he's in the pin. Didnt give sh!t others lives, always gettin into trouble makin his mother cry. I, dont see the point, in spendin all this money just to roll up joints.. that kill you, you givin money ta kill yourself. why you doin that, so you can look cool, man, you must wack. You see this lifestyle we live just aint safe, killin other people, woman gettin raped, we need to change our enviorment, so kids can live until they old enough to get into retirement. I see these thugs, and all they care about is money and drugs, what about god, family and friends, remember them? But go ahead, do what you gotta do to make some enz.

Give me some feedback. Is my first or second spit hotter?

i didnt read tha first , but this drop right here didnt catch my attention ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, it was aight , but should have been better ,,, juss add some metas and vocab in there

K, cool. Im new and a young'n so i aint that good yet..... yet