did i accidentally say something that you did not like?/
should i have closed up my pipe?/
an neva turned on a mic?/
should i have neva dicided to make a phone call at nite?/
have i reached a bulb to a light?/
tell me if im wrong or im right/
i jus wanna know whether or not im even wastin my time/
i dont think i am, but then again, i could be waistin my mind/
its like every time that i try, an not look so surprised/
i cant help but smile every time i look in ur eyes/
so why is it that im not getting back any vibes/
good or bad, the truth, or if it sounds like some lies/
it doesnt matter, all i wanna do is get a reply/
cuz i feel its impossible for me or you to deny/

(hook)=
(sing)cant you see, that you and me/
were meant to be/
but if you cant believe it/
i cant either/ cuz you get...
(rap) cuz you get, one time, an if you miss then you loose/
but i suffer too, dependin on the choice that you choose/

verse 2-
i remember the first time, surroumnded by books when we spoke/
i had a mind full of hooks, that if i said then i'd choke/
i thought to my self, "how can i act sweeter"/
an "how should i treat her"/
so i simply smiled and handed you my beeper/
i even taught my self a way that i can mask pain/
remained half sane/
when you was watchin a movie with ya boi based on the fast lane/
yet i act tamed/
like a lion kept under control/
but under my skull/
theres nothin left, not even my soul/
or my brain/
but i dont want you to hear about my pain/
i wanted happiness, but ended up with a migrain/
all i wanna know is if i should be whinin or "yey"in/
an whether or not you plan on leavin or stayin/

(hook 2x)

verse 3-
even jay said that he was "not the one"/
but i say forget a chapter cuz the book is done/
so why is it that i would decide to start a rap/
an leave a croud without explainin the aftermath/
i hav jus been hit up wit numerous blows/
like whitney houston, but i got a humerous nose/
an i told her to wait before she gets ready to leave/
"lemme switch up the hook before i get ready to breathe"/

(sing)i can see, that you an me/
werent meant to be/
and if you cant believe it/
ur conceded/ an you got...
(rap) you got ur shot, rite off the top/
an on the walls/
i gotta tally up another loss/ uh...

not bad, but the lines hwere kinda choppy, but a nice drop all around. i felt what u was saying in the verses

i got your message ego..bt i thought maybe a couple of lines fell off the syllable placement nahmean,a real long line with a short one jsu tdidnt sound right for it,but its mad easy to fix no doubt,i liked this though,i understand your point and the message,i think everyone relates to shit like this,everyones met someone that wasnt righ tfor them no doubt...

i liked th ehook though,the singing coming into the rap was nice as fuck,i liked the rap part you did for the chorus too,it was nice...

peep somethign of mine sometime eh...bismillah

hey, thaks playa, yo, fo reel, i was thinkin whether or not to put this online in text, cuz ur both rite, its choppy, but for reel, im thinkin bout putin this on an album, but im not sure, so evryone who checks this sh*t, reply, lemme know wut yall think, an lemme know if U think this is album material or wut not.
ne ways,im out
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yo ur rhymes were tight...i know that u collab wit mak a tight remix 2 that....it cool singin along wit

maybe we could battle man.....your choice, c ya around

ummmm I liked this drop , , really liked it dawg , , , ur lines were deep , this would be a nice audio ,,,,,, i liked it dawg ,, ,, keep spittin

yer ithink you could do it audio,if youjust elevated alittle and changed the choppiness nahmean,i liked it but it needs a little work to be audio material nahmean...dont get discouraged i dont mean it in abad way,im jsut sayin ,just up it a little..

yea, i hear ya Atetrack, but yea, i need to work out some bugs w/ this track, but yo, thanks for the luv evryone, an jus so my album doesnt come out to be some bubble gum materiated sh*t, i plan on doin a collab w/ one of my bois, an well, i dont wanna give away too much, so ill just post my verse to it in a few minutes.
once again, thanks for the props and honesty from everyone, cuz this was some sh*t that i was really fealin when i wrote it.
ne ways, im out.
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yo a liked that, flow wasnt really totally constant but yo got there in the end...somepeople just lose it and give up lol

keep spittin

yea, thanks panther, i feel betta knowin im gettin luv for this sh*t from females too!!!