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Old 05-10-03, 07:06 PM   #1
Keys aka Vital
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night on da town

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Riding 4 deep on my way to the A.T.L
I’m a Drop these niggas off and head to the hotel
I got this fine long legged broad at the tel waiting
Thoughts of us running through my head I’m anticipating
I walk through the door she already masturbating
So I yell out lord save me She new I was infatuated
My first moves were already contemplated
She gave me those bedroom eyes so I went and I made it
I knew that her man he was gonna hate it
I started the 4 play and was already at three
Showty was like a ocean I knew she was feeling me
I kiss from her head and stop before her toes
Next thing I know our clothes were hit floor
Bodies’ touching bodies’ skin touching skin
I was knocking at her door showty let me in.
In 2 hours I was finish she said hit it again
P**y so good must be a sin
So I flipped her 2 time and hit it from the hind side
I busted a nut on her face and caught her on her blind side
It was almost 4 so I had to ride
She said don’t leave I said there aint’t no tie that binds
So dipped and headed to Decatur
Caught up with this dime and made her
Lick me from me head to my toe
She spent a little in the cold
While bobbing on my south pole
Now it’s about 6 so I had to go
Wait till tomorrow and I’ll show
2 more hoes I’m a Pro.
I hit the P**y for free I don’t spend no doe
It’s time to F**K again so I gotta GO!!
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Old 05-10-03, 07:35 PM   #2
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It was iight up your vocab
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Old 05-11-03, 02:46 AM   #3
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Try to make your lines evener... It helps the flow, which was bad in this.

Vocab and lyrical delivery was weak.

Content was newbieish.. Keep working though.
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Old 05-11-03, 12:12 PM   #4
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Old 05-11-03, 12:56 PM   #5
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Keys where are da vocab and wordplay dawg , , , this ur first drop witout vocab ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, but this shit was aight
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Old 05-11-03, 02:05 PM   #6
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i was tryin ta step off all dat for a hot second
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