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The Last Time
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It has been a while since the continents divided.
It's been a black and white dream since the last time silk ran down my coat of arms. A concerto of crackles from the fireplace, and still no sound like the breath you gave. Natural oils engulfed from a freshly lit match, and still no place quite as warm as inside you. Our minds spoke in swaying motions like a pendulum of sharp wit. Together, pouring toward the center of ourselves, like boiling water. We knew we would have to evaporate or overflow eventually. And that was the last time. |
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IP:
uppin it. man i can't anyone to say anything about my work?
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IP:
come on man i just want to hear what people think. i need some critisizm so i can make my skills better.
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IP:
< Likes it.
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Great spirits often encounter violent opposition from mediocre minds.
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IP:
your the only one - everyone else is sleepin on it.
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IP:
this shit is like a hookers bed - its gettin mad slept on....
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IP:
y'all suck if you sleep on this anymore. this is some tight emotional poetry and no one can add something to it. not a good job or even some constructive critisizm..............
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IP:
to me that was bullshit. i know you could do a lot betta than that. that shit sounds like sumthin i would write. yous a lot betta than that kid. apply yaself dog.
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IP:
its not a rhyme it was just some poetry. i wasn't tryin to battle someone i was just puttin out some poetry.
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