this is to a friend who asked me into his crew/i worte this rap to let you know i think about you/don't have to say no name cause you know who you are/ you treat me so good make me feel like a superstar/when i'm alone i think about you and wonder if you feel the same way that i do/when i'm at home can't wait to get on rap battles so i can pm you/you trip me out when you snap on people and their crew/i like you cause you're very clever too/we're too far so one day i may have the chance to write you/one day we'll have a chance to meet/until then i'll keep your name a secret/when i'm alone at home i want to pick up the phone but don't have your number/to tell you that if we where together how i would stick wit you through the coldest weather/ since we're too far i'll let you even write me letters/you are so different from the other fellas/i like you so much nothin else even really matters/this is to you and this whole fuckin rap is tru

Hmph.

......way 2 rep BRE.......uppin fo' my fam.........oh, yea..........bash will like this one *wink*lol

well...that wasw real simple werent it,i aint hatin but,you had a meanign and a point to what you were saying,amybe spacin the bars would make it easier to follow...it was a nice verse,it was very simple and you rhyme scheme was really really simple,you need to add multies and wordplay into your peices then itll be aiight,but you had a point to wha tyou were saying and you sound like you meaning it,an dif your feelin it,then its al good,you jus tneed to keep practicign aiight missy...good up....


peep my zions verse,tell me wha tyou think,im uppin it in th erb legends forum too....

yeah, bit simpicistic, keep elevatin though

try to use multi's etc...

you treat me so good make me feel like-a-superstar/
no-one thought we'd take our mystical love-this-far/

well something little better than that, lol!