before u read
1.this is my first open mic
2.its NOT just copying canibus song he did bout aids-i had the idea before i herd it and i just was inspired by the way he talks like the illness is a person
3.if u dont like it...i know its basic...just i want sum pointers..like i sed its basic vocab just need to some pojnters 1st


Real Name nameless ageless un convicted criminal, like a beast tameless hes famous for being unrestricted when attacking ya physical.
His sexual preference is unknown, but known that hes attacked both testicles and breasts,
A renowned killer fighting the world alone, prone to destroying ya lungs and taking your last breaths.
See lighting a cigarette, its provoking and making it look ya hoping to brawl,
Not joking-more like quoting “If you step to BIG C…your gonna fall!”
He attacks all types of races, faces in different places for no reason,
Through the world he paces, never wastes his-time, hes on the prowl all seasons.
He brings physical violence-but first an evil appliance-his boy called Tumour,
Them two are a pain bringing alliance-together one up on science…they laugh at the way scientists cant predict if BIG C will follow T later or sooner.
No matter if you’re a priest, he’ll make you deceist or at least pain if he hadn’t killed him,
Killed crips without a piece, took the life of my niece and other innocent children.
It makes me mad to see, these wars bringing fatalitys, when the real enemy is this plague,
I find that shit an abnormality, I want to make BIG C a murderous fallacy, but im afraid it will never fade.
How will he ever stop, is if all we got, is cops with this wanted man-lacking a physical description, is there a link to the killings…theres not, we kinda can stop T but in questioning it aint snitchin.

i liked it thought it was well written

thanks alot uppin...ill be likely to re do it after with better vocab and EXPAND alot more..but just i couldnt be bothered to do like 40 lines staright away

upinn

Tight piece

TIGHT? lol come on i want sum pointers but thanks