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Old 05-21-03, 01:11 AM   #1
The Necromancer
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Another Love Song

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Falling in love, until you hit the concrete
Sweat forms on your palms, you're too scared to speak
You're too scared to move, you're too scared to sleep
You're too scared to nod your head moving to the beat

Just another love song, Pleasure in the sound
Pleasure in your lips, pleasure a smile from the frown
Bring the pleasure, from the soul to the body
And just fall into my arms, cause girl y'know you got me
Got me, cop me, trade me for someone better
And if she wants to leave me you know I better let her
I better let her do her own thing just so she can say
That I was never the mean old man to stand in her way
I'm not like her father, condensending-patranizing
Realizing I'm a different man, situation sizing
Waiting for me to make my move, watching me watching her
Waiting for her to move at all so I can punish her
And beat her bloody body as her soul escapes free
How can she think I'm so cold, that aint reality
Because I'm my own man, I'm in love with her bliss
Not the kind of possesion, but with the kindest kiss
To show that I love her and I'll always treat her right
From the sun rising in the morning to it setting at night
And when darkness has fallen and the stars hang in the sky
I will look into her eyes and then I'll know why
She thought I was someone else, someone of authority
Not the equality we are, but something thats been tearing at me
Scaring me to believe that I can be someone else
Knowing that if I ever lose it we'll both be needing help
And if that day comes when I feel to raise my fist
God save me and kill just to save a kiss

Falling in love, until you hit the concrete
Sweat forms on your palms, you're too scared to speak
You're too scared to move, you're too scared to sleep
You're too scared to nod your head moving to the beat
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Old 05-21-03, 01:13 PM   #2
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This was pretty good writing. Good words, flow, and all that. I got a little confused about it though.

Waiting for me to make my move, watching me watching her
Waiting for her to move at all so I can punish her
And beat her bloody body as her soul escapes free
How can she think I'm so cold, that aint reality

That's what got me confused. Is that how she sees you? But you're not really like that? Other than that part, which I didn't really understand, the rest of it was good.

"Because I'm my own man, I'm in love with her bliss
Not the kind of possesion, but with the kindest kiss
To show that I love her and I'll always treat her right
From the sun rising in the morning to it setting at night
And when darkness has fallen and the stars hang in the sky
I will look into her eyes and then I'll know why"

Those are the lines I liked the most. Good imagery. I liked this and hope you keep posting more up.
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Old 05-24-03, 03:47 PM   #3
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I'll go ahead and up this for you. Only 1 response isn't good enough.
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Old 05-24-03, 04:37 PM   #4
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feelin this for sure. its tight. and like legendary said its confusin at points. tha mood seems to shift baq and forth kinda. i dono. maybe its jus me

"Falling in love, until you hit the concrete
Sweat forms on your palms, you're too scared to speak
You're too scared to move, you're too scared to sleep
You're too scared to nod your head moving to the beat"

-those my fav linez

overall great post. feelin it. much respect
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Old 05-24-03, 08:50 PM   #5
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Hey, you guys don't know yet.

Necro's mind-set consists of such darkness, that confusion ensues in most.

Most get used to it though. And even 'get' it...



Necro, you always got a way of getting into this 'topic' in your own (i wont say darkly) Necro like way...and you knwo something, though this at times would seem a bit conventional...the 'necro' factor kept popping up....

...enjoyed Necro, in a obscure kind of way...

..resp...
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