thisis a poem that my friend done and she aint in RB and she posted it somewhere else and no one replied to it so i agreed to post it here

tell me what you think about it and ill forward it to her

Time is full of obsessions and relations, which add up to make the fragments we call life
Some find them important others let them slip by
Every thing reverses as people grow older
Growin up and growing down, always getting harder
When you watch life pass you by it seems like a life time
But after it all youll feel like it flew by
time is a dimension we may never understand, but it will always be around.
Questions of how it started, will never be found
time wasted, is time's biggest crime.
But as wel live our lives we look back over time
But forward is where were goin, never knoing just where well end up what the outcome will be
But if we all knew these things thre would be n such mystery
Yall ma feel life bne pointless but it’s the way that we heal
You must swallow yo gut and move forward, be free
Open yo heart and bare yo soul to tha world
Take those crucial steps forward and let your life unfold

uppin fo opinions

uppin

thanks for the comments im an mc

eh ...... okay lol nica ta meet ya..........kinda lookin for opinons though lol uppin

the shit was deep ma no doubt tell ya friend she got talent witt dis poetry shit tell her keep doin the shit iight ma u be koo ~1~

This was a nice writing. I liked it. The rhyming was basic on it but that didn't really matter because of the content, in my opinion.

"When you watch life pass you by it seems like a life time
But after it all youll feel like it flew by
time is a dimension we may never understand, but it will always be around."

That right there couldn't be more true. I was really feeling those lines.

"You must swallow yo gut and move forward, be free
Open yo heart and bare yo soul to tha world
Take those crucial steps forward and let your life unfold"

I liked those lines a lot too. Plus it was a good way to end the writing.

she says thanks lol shes behind me wit a big sile on her face lol

uppin' fo opinions

Not many people do a lot of responding in open mic, I see. Might have got more responses in poetry?

Hey, I'm the one that wrote the poem, decided to join today. Ta for all opinions. Ta legendary, I'll post it on poetry.

honest truthful yet also simple... it didn't really grab me but hey, I'd still like to see more of her stuff. OonNEe

i really liked this.....do some more stuff-if u want more poetic responses tho do it in da poetry section except ppl sleep on shit there

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Ta guys, still workin on some new shit. I'll keep em comin'