This is just a start to it but wanna know what every thinks so far on the start of it. Prehaps good critism would help ya know if its wack or something prehaps giving me idea on how to make it betta would do...

The sound we first hear we pass by as another scream |
Martin Lurther King J.r had a dream |
What if that went un-heard like the scream? |
Where would the world be now? |
How would we feel, a simple wow |
To describe the way we feel |
The name is Reno, trying to keep it real |
Each time I spit i think about the kids without a meal |
Such a sad thing we have in the world ran by kingpins and a money hunrgy shark |
The world seems dark |
In the eyes of those who make their home on the bench we pass by in the park |

Thats it for now im still working though.

Hey...Thats not the worse Ive seen...But...For battles you may need to be a bit more harsh...and Not such simple Ryhmes...

peAce

Ummmmmmmmmmmmmmmm what exactly where you thinking? like twiztid said not exactly the worse thing ive seen but definately could've been way way better

Whack............And u cant be posting short threads like this in open mics........If u gon post a thread.........Then make a whole song..........And ur tittle is whack........Just a spit................U cant be Postin dat in open mic

Yea i know about the battle thing and this wasnt meant as battle, and about the title of it...thats not its title it was just something i put it as to have it here.

Not good, not bad..... I don't know what to really say. You should elevate on your rhymes though.... definately

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