this nagga named trill,
beat me in a battle,
i will make him rattle,
then i'll crattle,
his mattle,
when i jattle,
his nattle,
with my sattle,
yo yo yo i'm the lyrikal kang,
with that big dick thang,
when i slang,
i bang bang bang bang abng,
man u betta undastand,
i aint bland,
but i got that big dick,
that will make ur girl sick

stop sleeping on my posts i amt he best bttler/rapper on rab battles

this was Ill.........damn..........Ur wordplay is Ill....................Ur punchlines is Ill......Man you're Iller than Trill..........Dawg you're da next Tupac............I like ur style............You're Ill to da fullest dawg............................Damn You're Just Ill

lol what is this man? i give ppl advise and shit and dont hate on any1 and be constructive n all, but i wanna battle you dawg dis shit was in whack........whack........whack,,,,, dawg put some effort in man jesus dis was terrible, i aint giving advise on dis here lol id have to spit o whole fucking song for the amount you need, dawg read some shit round here and learn, start with bre and chrits stuff work yo arse past dat stuff man, n please dont poste no more like dis unless u in a battle wid me iight....

lol lol

"this was Ill.........damn..........Ur wordplay is Ill....................Ur punchlines is Ill......Man you're Iller than Trill..........Dawg you're da next Tupac............I like ur style............You're Ill to da fullest dawg............................Damn You're Just Ill" bash what the.....

lol bitch u wanted another battle.................................lol

please tell me you are not seriously considering this to be a verse.
this one of the wackest things I have ever read.
Rule #1 : don't make up words unless the might look like real
words or have some relevence to the piece you are writing.
Rule#2 : have something that kinda flows, or at least bars with
the same or close to the same amount of syllables.
Rule#3 : don't write about your cock unless it's in a clever way
with amusing wordplay and multis. Actually, fuck that
don't write about your cock.

I would've added shit about wordplay and more advanced vocab,
but I don't think you're ready for that yet.
Don't drop stupid shit, it makes you look bad
Peace

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she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

hahahahahahhaa....whata fag......hahaha...bash i like your reply to this....hahaha

bash's reply had better wordplay and creativity then the whole fucking piece............lol thats not hard,,,, dis shit has made me laugh more then my saddam piece

umm this had alot of multies and shit but that shit was too simple needs mad work and if this is the way you battle dude then don't get all upset cause you lost that's the real

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shut the fuck up

even if i stutter i'll still sh-sh-shit on you/ pun

dead in middle of little of little italy
little did we know that we riddle
some middle man who didn't do ditally/ pun

this was dope.....i'm just a bigger gangsta then any of u fuckaz

WAck & Simple....

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got beef with trill,got beef with ai...

fool got herpes or somethign by the sounds of it...

You Sneak attack, and i'm "comin" back,
like sex with ya mom,or you jerkin to ya porno stack,
of "magazines" son, my dick was a "gun", now how you luh dat?

i thought i'd type a bar for trill, my teammate with a dickryder tryin ta get in his ass...

^^^..d-stroyed....