I can’t stand it, I’m abandoned //
I wish I could just vanish to a better planet //
Find a dream to just grab it //
I fell on my face; I just slammed it, DAMN IT! //
Why can’t I succeed, all I want for me, is you to believe //
In the words that I speak //
Open your eyes, its time to start seeing //
I’m not a freak, I’m a human being //
Who’s always dreaming, to rid the pain I’m always feeling //
My souls bleeding, and leaking the words on this page that your reading //
The words that I’m speaking come from a heart that’s always grieving //
Always reaching for the life that I’m achieving //

We need to elevate, be great
Need a taste, of a better place
Face another race without a trace of hate

I’m soulless, I have no history //
My life’s a mystery, I need a wrist to bleed //
Need a rule to breach //
Wreak peace with my freedom of speech //
I’m stuck, I’m frozen, my wounds are forever open //
Every dream is broken, every word is spoken //
Its clear, I’m not chosen, I need space //
I’m in a daze, my life is like a deadly maze //
I watch it steadily cave, as I remain without a name //
On this deepest level of pain //
My face always shows the shame //

We need to elevate, be great
Need a taste of a better place
Face another race without a trace of hate

Not one tear is shed for me, not one man has bled for me //
I dwell on anti-ecstasy, I can’t rest in peace //
I’m the only one down here, the rest are free //
I’m stressed, there is no relief, I’m blessed but it can’t be seen //
I’m on my last breath, but I can’t die, I’m past death //
So cold, I haven’t even laughed yet //
Can’t get past it, this world is hurting me //
My sins are burning me, that’s my life for eternity//
Can’t turn a cheek, I have to learn and teach //
To reach my yearn for peace //

not bad dawg, u got somin here, needs the bars to be more equal in length, n some bars u had like 2 bars for what shoulda been 1, ur wordplay was basic but dat shit comes naturally as does elivatin to the next lvl, overall good drop from a new kid..

ay yo cheack ma shit called Morals..

keep spittin

yo for ur 1st post i thought that shit was really tight man, keep writin fa sho peace kid.

yo thanks alot for tha kind words

lookin for sum more feedback

still uppin fo feedback

shit was alrite.....not too bad for ur first post...........try n spit about a topic next time n try n label ur threads a bit better.............................vocab needs work.....good multies though

hot

started out a bit ruogh but picked up and started gettin ill towards tha end,good first drop,keep postin,peace kidd.

that was a pretty tight first drop! it's like 100x better than what my first one was ,

Keep droppin' them dawg!

Can't say much that them other cats ain't say already... but good first piece. You need to elevate your vocab., your idea behind the piece kind of got lost to me... anyways, keep workin' on ya skills. HOLLA.