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Old 05-29-03, 05:18 PM   #1
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Exclamation I suck

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I might suck at rapp`n/
but you know i will be tapp`n/
these asses in the masses/
in the middle of my classes/
and i crush these player haters in to ashes/
cause everything your wear clashes/
now excuess me will i go somke some weed/
cause that mostly what your and i need/
and your might thing were some kind of special breed/
when were simply as gay as creed/
now i hope you don't read/
this gay rhyme/
and think it was a waste of your time/
cause i sux at rapp`n so i think/
i will stick to ass tapp`n/

^^^Suxs your opion plz don't care i know i am not that great check out Unreal_1 his are dope
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Old 05-29-03, 05:21 PM   #2
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Yeah u do SUCKKKKK
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Old 05-29-03, 05:24 PM   #3
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I liked the smokin weed part----

& I know yer just jokin around--cuz yer better than this

surrender to the flow----

thanx 4 peepin my Mystical Minstrel spit glad ya liked it
check out my newest one-

Just anothre Madman

let me hear ya--

peace
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Old 05-29-03, 05:24 PM   #4
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Fuck you Bash,
thanks Sen for the support holla La Familia pwns U

Last edited by Grim85 : 05-29-03 at 05:27 PM.
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Old 05-29-03, 07:49 PM   #5
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yo i don't know how to flow/
but if you must know/
i am here just fo` show/
and for the my only real ho/
that always comes/
when i call/
the never stall/'
there here in a jiffy/
i can barley get a wiff/
of this weed/
that i need/
to feed/
my kinda breed/
who can't read/
and always wanna leed/

I sux
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Old 05-29-03, 07:52 PM   #6
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^^^^^hahahahahahahahha...........This forum aint no kindergarten shit........U spit like a 2 year old dawg.........Elevate.........Up ur vocab and wordplay
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Old 05-29-03, 07:54 PM   #7
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elevate my vocab and word pla gotcha i will make sure to use a dictionary next time like you. thanks for the tip tho, o yea
Blut-TMC Roczors you! sorry!
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Old 05-29-03, 07:56 PM   #8
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I believe he do be clownin Bash....
that doesn't make him any smarter, but nobody can suck this much
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Old 05-29-03, 07:58 PM   #9
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Grim u a dumbass fool..........Keep spittin simple shit witout wordplay and vocab and u will see if niggaz will give u feedback.......U fuckin newbie..........go ahead , , , dont elevate , , dont elevate...............U fuckin DR.SUEES mah fucka
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Old 05-29-03, 07:58 PM   #10
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yea guys i just am like righing randmom things down i am not even really deep in thought if i really thought about it i might beable to put out a decent one, i will try and come up with something when i have time thanks for the input tho!
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Old 05-29-03, 08:27 PM   #11
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New*

I use playdouhg/
kinda like the way my rhymes Flow/
this is my show/
you all don't know/
that i live in a pile of snow/
and once i start to rap my body starts to glow/
like a buring fire/
i am evil you all should be calling me dire/
i am standing on top this spire/
trying to get someone to hire/
me the most grim emcee/
now i think i am about to go on a killing spree/
hopefully it will just end with your and me/
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Old 05-29-03, 09:35 PM   #12
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Grim you're up for a battle........8 lines..........i'm a go set it up in front lines if you're up for it
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Old 05-30-03, 01:59 AM   #13
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yo jus keep doin wut your doin, and battle that dude you got nothin to lose!
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Old 05-30-03, 02:24 AM   #14
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aight Grim, first of all you named your verse "I suck", and i have been readin all of tha replies, when you openly admitted that you suck, and you still are defendin yourself. IF you dont want tha criticism dont post on tha site, and maybe if you spent more time on wordplay and rhymin you would recieve positive feed back, think about it, peace, 1 luv
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Old 05-30-03, 02:32 AM   #15
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dawg, ur lyrics are whack, ur bars are to short ur wordplay n vocab is elimentery,,,,, u got flow tho...... i think that where ur goin wrong g, u see u got in places 3 word bars........ n thats just cus it flowed, iight a flow dont make shit,,,,, emotions,,,,,, aggresion,,,,,,, wordplay,,,,,,,, elivatin,,,, vocab,,,, all of dis shit makes decent lyrics,,, try n remember that...... why not write a lyric thats important to ya or somin make yo lines full,,, dont worry bout the flow so muchh respect for tryin huh keep spittin
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