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Old 06-12-03, 01:29 PM   #1
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Shadow Poetry

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Hidden within
The shadows of night
Poets by the dozens
Begin to write
Pens, the paintbrush
Of imagination
Blank paper, a canvas
Of creation
Verses in rhythm,
A rhyming scheme
A poet's life,
A written dream
Seeking the light,
Souls revealed
Sharing of poetry,
Once concealed
No longer hidden,
The darkness unfolds
To reveal the truth when read,
But never told...
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Old 06-12-03, 01:30 PM   #2
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What d'ya think?
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Old 06-12-03, 01:33 PM   #3
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It was nice.......

Verses in rhythm,
A rhyming scheme
A poet's life,
A written dream

I really liked that part.......the drop was tight.........good work
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Old 06-12-03, 01:46 PM   #4
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yea i was feelin tha whole vibe of a poets passion, i b on that tip myself sometimes...1
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Old 06-14-03, 12:12 PM   #5
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That was useless. YOU SMELL!!!

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I smell so much that i gotta vent it out on here...deodrant anyone?

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Old 06-17-03, 08:58 PM   #6
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Seriously, this was nice.

Liked the way you approached it. Kind of on the edge, intense yet well executed.

Really got deep into the mindset and soul of it all (the essence even..)...

...in a way which many people would struggle to..

..resp...

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Old 06-19-03, 01:47 AM   #7
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Nice job, you really delivered your message without overloading the structure. I appreciate your orginization, it makes your work functional from the readers standpoint. Many come at the reader from a biased angle, clouding the true message. Varentoa is right on with his positive feedback...
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Old 06-19-03, 02:56 AM   #8
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Originally posted by bouncedoggydog
Nice job, you really delivered your message without overloading the structure. I appreciate your orginization, it makes your work functional from the readers standpoint. Many come at the reader from a biased angle, clouding the true message. Varentoa is right on with his positive feedback...


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