These days life's toil and troubles make my blood boil and bubble
Feeling alone. . im the lone rose that growed from soil and rubble.
Drowned in puddles formed from the tears i shed over my ex - girl
Because right now . .Love is nothing but another four letter word.
For better, for worse. . Maybe it was pure fate that we'd seperated
now we argue over the very same ring we were once engaged with.
She's amazing . . . . what made me think to cheat on this princess?
i made her a Laughing Stock. . like Doctor Hibert from the simpsons.
Id slept with her best friend, now she dosent want shit to do with me
so im back on the net . . searching for that Window of XP- tunity.
drowning in a ocean of mixed emotions, . .then asking myself Why?
Why the hell id gambled with love, and lost the best thing in my life.
Losing her was like death itself, i wish theres someway things could change
Our love used to Burn with passion, now its more an Extinguished Flame. .

in our society of physical presents and materialism,
there are problems with basic values and traits,
and for me to put a voice to my grievous antagonism,
will cause me to be treated with unsupported hate.

The flame of intelligence is gone from the offspring,
they're slaves to their toys and their video games,
neurons frying, losing arts and the ability to sing,
out in joy from their happiness at being the same,
as their friends who just smoke packs, and drink,
and do drugs and flunk, losing the ability to think,
to create art with a flame of passionate yearning,
they go on as if they have never stopped learning.
this generation after mine, full of insane thoughts,
are pulling apart existence and making God a fool,
and finally when intelligence comes back, we'll rot,
we'll be in a downward spiral, too late for renewal.

so I emplore thee, children of those who came before me,
see the fault in your ways, treat life as more than a game,
it's prescious, like queens, it requires to be treated regally,
or your ways will be the water that extinguished life's flame....

i like that man, but ur ryhmes too ka while too undertsand like had to go ove vouplke of times in top verse cause not much setup for em,

good piece but, can see u got skillz n ur own style,

peace

This was a good peice
Not to SHABBY

woah, vex, this is uber crazy lookin.
our verses were like totally different in style and topic, other than the extinguished flame bit lol.
anyways, your verse is dope.
One

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

^ Blaow! Yeah, it was kinda weird but i havent dropped a piece at RBs for a good two months and thought this might set the standard a little higher. .

was diffrent very good as always good work m8

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This is a dope sig.

I liked the shit.
Ya'll do good together.
I would like to hear it in Audio tho,
See how u guys really work together, and sound together

this was incredibly good. both verses were good in their own ways but put together then the verses just put somethin up better.
can ya check out my piece
the skitzo:me vs. me

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Only God can judge me, Who THE FUCK IS YOU?!

this was a very good piece, u guys had a good subject matter going on, worplay and rhymes were aight and very good respectively, flow was very on point, i really liked yo hooks as well. sometimes tho it read like an audio piece, with like not proepr mrhymes but thats not a bad thing, becoz it all made sense and would be coo

so Eborted Verdict- B+

lol, my piece got stickied! whoo! most of them usually just get slept on till someone puts them in legends, but anyways, thanks for the feed peoples!

cool...sticky time, baby!

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

Bleh - i got pinkslipped from here, so this is prolly the last thing i'll have up anyways.

good luck State. .

who pink slipped you?
Peace out if you see this bro.

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Life isn't a bitch...
she's just sick of being personified -Sage Francis

Second verse was the best in my opinion.