Im the norman bates of hip hop,ima serial hit maker//
and wen theres bitches tryin to hate at me,ima serious back braker//
stock brocker of rhymes,that means i got a lot of flows to shock-and-rock ya//
im the most buzz'ifying thing that hit Pac's fans since Big's "who shot ya"//
i let my verbals knock-and-rot ya,to sock-and-knock ya eye balls out//
i eat ya iris like a fat kid with lots of cash and bison snout//
so get ya pensils out,its time to practice since im on the stage//
my rhymes are biblical to the people,so yall shud write me a brand new page//
fill hearts with rage since im the illest,plus i can murder within 5 bars//
some say i strike like the virus polio,some say im like the virus SARS//
complete my time up in the lab since i only pay-my-way with the ghettos paper//
so yall remember as the blud whos like the fuckin serial hit creator//


yo i know its prety short....but what the fuck....its only a TINY sumthin....what yall think...??

Its Tight for A Newbie , But U need too Up Ur Vocab

i wasnt feelign the flow but some of it was aiight. Need to up vocab

this was tight, especially for a newb.... the flow as o.k, but nuttin special...the wordplay was ill... this line was tight:
"my rhymes are biblical to the people,so yall shud write me a brand new page//"..lol

keep it up dawg!

yeh for a newbie this was very good. nice worplay bible line was ace howeva theline i wasnt felling was the polio/sars line, flow was good, vocab was aight could be upped, your mos def ill for anewbie keep writing for sure

Eborted Verdict-B-

^ Hey MRB, this is the guy thats doing Kidderminster with me!

Nice to see you here big, this was pretty straight, nice wordplay, flow was hard to catch but i suppose it fits over whatever beat you wrote this to, some nice lines, the bible one was easily the standout. Not a bad drop my man, could of made it longer i felt and developed it more. Not a bad piece though.

Good going!

yo cam lad when u doing kiddy? i mite pop over there for da day to see wooshy then go and watch u wid him

i liked dat shit
it was good for a newb

'yo....i didnt have a beat or nuthin....jus came to me Cam....anyway....up my vocab,,,? how the fuck do i do that...??

^ Read the dictionary my laddo!

yeah but what excactly do i do....?? what parts and shit....do i read all the A's....and move on...??

no my man, lol, just use bigger words, try linkin em together n c how u do! oh by the way that was tight dawg especially 4 a newb! KEEP IT up--- bible line was ill, 4real!

check my shit in open mic n giv sum feed bac y'all, thanx!