years after years i lost to the struggle
troubled fears got me in tears, like no one loves you
trained to aim at the sky, never to kill
drinkin 40's to pass time, smokin blunts just to chill
my enemys are my closests friends, until the end
family and drugs got me fucked up, enuff said
this time im ready to die, please god take me up
delusions spark a fuse, releasin rage, fuckin me up
insane to the holy, but i still starve for my reign
to be leader for my niggas who dont have any game
to show them how to play a bitch, for head
make a page of a song, but my lifes the livin dead
i'll never be ahead, probaly dead before i reach eigthteen......
theres to much pain.

Looks kinda biten from tha Ja Rule version on his pain is love album

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flowed pretty well, but I got the impression of Ja Rule when I read it!

yea its goes to the beat so much pain, just kinda reworded it

i wasnt really feelin this...complex ur style, too simplistic....that was more like a poem.....

man your a fuckin idiot, most songs come from poems

yea i agree wit everyone else when i read it i was thinkin ja rule, but for what u had i thought the vocab was ok, the content was good, and overall it was aight. keep elevatin and postin dude.

good flow and rhythm, was an aite drop.

wow u need to learn to endure proper critisism......ur the fuckin idiot......wtf was that bullshit u wrote up there????.....ja rule????.......wtf r u thinkin?......hes the whackest nigga out there........anywayz......most songz dont come from poems.....get it straight......u need to take bad critisism.......dont expect all good....damn......i havent been on this site ina while and now i kno y.....cuz of whack niggaz like u.........u really need MULITS, VOCAB, and all the other criteria's to build a proper flow........so dun....ur ass needz to elevate..........and yes ur the fuckin idiot........lmao @ u.........i kno i'll rip u............im out......elevate bitch.......