A man is on a journey which involves walking through the desert. On his way he finds an oasis where he sees 3 other people sitting down around a camp fire. He goes and joins them, after a while everyone starts to tell stories, the man listens very carefully.

An elderly looking man starts to speak
A long time ago after the ice-age n comets,
From the heavens they came god’s prophets,
Great ones still remembered like Muhammad,
Teaching us Islam and not to cause harm,
Showing us how life was an unflawed farm,
It’s our choice whether we are the animals,
Or money blood thirsty Mason cannibals,
Whether we’re the care takers or the herbs,
Protecting us from views seen by birds,
But now we cant think for ourselves
Our minds remain thoughtless,
No feelings for our fellow man
Our soul remains heartless,
Sandy lakes getting blood filled,
Our minds need to get distilled,
The evil is needs to get purified,
Complex situations like this
Needs to get simplified.

A young man in plain clothes starts to talk
Hello my name is Aladdin,
I don’t mean to be bragging,
But I got a magical flying carpet,
A pet monkey I found in the market,
Formerly he was a casual thief,
Now that career was brief,
Cuse me and him found a genie,
First he acted like a big meanie,
I got 3 wishes and for my very last,
I said “genie our friendship should last”,
After that I hooked up with the princess,
“Aladdin she’s none of your business”
Said Razul the chief of security,
“Your nothing but an impurity”,
The next day I won her heart,
“I’m not a fool Razul u retard”,
I met a smart ass parrot called Yago,
He got into too much trouble-though,
The ruler of Agraba was the Sultan,
Yago would regularly insult-him,
One day I’ll marry my love Jasmine,
Aladdin will be a street legend
No double crossing has-been.

Pretty good piece. I like it.

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good idea, storytelling ability was good, some syllable counts where long but overall the flow was there, i dug the content and wordplay.


pieces.