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Old 06-26-03, 01:47 PM   #1
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Exclamation The Haiku flow

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I be the hot rhyme sayer, the blunt maker, the body shaker
The muthafuckin hip hop savior//
If you want it with me, you'll have to make an appointment
Cuz im breakin emcees mics leavin em sore with no ointment//
Ben Gay ass niggaz tryin to tarnish the god
I spit lyrical masterpieces like verses from the holy koran//
Im sick of wack ass rappers, who think they know what real lyrics are about
Knowing that none of you punks can stomp me out//
Call me funny but its no laughing matter where i stand
My verbal vendetta will body you, ya bitch and ya man//
So there it is, the dopest flow of all time
Fuckin with me is crazy, you must be out your monkey-ass mind//
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Old 06-26-03, 02:07 PM   #2
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im gonna try to be nice...this wasn't all that good. this seemed to me like you were tryin to get a fast flow.
peep my piece The Lonesome(need a friend)

try to elevate and use a different rhyme scheme
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