~Reflections~

Reflections...
God put the strength in me,i'm bendin knees,people keep temptin me...
Reflections...
Give me some suggestions please,leave my mark on the world before I rest in peace...

Got a gat in my hand, and in the other a bible,seems everyone i know is no longer reliable...
Friendships break but life still goes on,nothin to do but express my struggles into a song...
Can't give up now, gotta be strong and move on down this line,god is my life gonna change? Lord send me a sign...
Now my mind is black,blind to the world outside of me,plz Lord don't let me die...just let me see...

Reflections...
God put the strength in me,i'm bendin knees,people keep temptin me...
Reflections...
Give me some suggestions please,leave my mark on the world before I rest in peace...

Now Im changing my life,forgetting my past,hopefully this relationship with god will last...
Still expressing my feelings through rhymes and poetry,im out of the darkness,the world is bright,i can see...
Given up my life of crime,this aint no lie,finally i made a mark before i had to die...

Reflections...
God put the strength in me,i'm bendin knees,people keep temptin me...
Reflections...
Give me some suggestions please,leave my mark on the world before I rest in peace...

aight tell me waht yall think of it...WuN

Uppin on this poem aight? Hit it up fo me'......WuN

I liked this...honestly i really did..very heart felt...neva give up kid...hmm..funny contradiction..."gat in one hand..bible in tha otha"...but nice piece...God bless..1.

thx trinity appreciate it. Uppin on this Poem...WuN...

that was really good.....the flow was great ...vocabs were well used.

hmmm...the repetition of "Reflections" really added the creativeness and strong content of the piece...i wrote a reflection poem once and i did the whole repetition thing to but the only difference is...the setting was that i was lookin at myself at the mirror then i took it from there...

"Now Im changing my life,forgetting my past,hopefully this relationship with god will last...
Still expressing my feelings through rhymes and poetry,im out of the darkness,the world is bright,i can see...
Given up my life of crime,this aint no lie,finally i made a mark before i had to die..."

for some reason i liked this part...hmm maybe because its like the whole climax of the poem...i felt it when i read it

some good ish right there...this is i think the best one i read so far from you....

keep droppin!

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aight appreciate it thx shiz aight uppin on this poem hit it up fo me....WuN.....

nice piece, i havent been up fer a long min, n urs in the first piece i read cuz i once wrote a piece called reflections, mine was nothin like urs, but still nice, but keep ya head up, things have ta get wrose b 4 they get betta, im tryin to make myself believe that rite now but i ahve sum faith in that

aight hope you will get throuhh ok uppin.....WuN....

Aye, an interesting piece in a way..

...a rawness that was channeled quite well. Using that 'recurring' structure which echoed your feelings and thoughts. Though i felt that part could've been done a bit better, maybe the content was a bit loose...

...but the emotions were strong, really bringing one into the piece and part of you...

..resp..

aight thx alot apprieciate the response uppin on this poem.........

I liked that too

Wow, that was good, I think you're onto sometihing. This should be some kind of song, you should try and get it recorded or something, honestly, flow, vocab, all that good stuff that was already said, keep it up man
peace

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Aight thx for the responses uppin on this poem.......