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06-28-03, 04:28 PM
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Simulatory personification of......
IP:
Elated raptures continue
Aclitimizing to the heightening exuberance Expressions needed truthful given Experiences come and go Responsibility out the window Appropriatness disemboweled Ambassadatory acts fronted in the beginning True revelations shown after time Wholistic comfort found after the natural healer Prolific actions found through initial expediencey Quickly it all may dissolve Stars reached through untouchable optimism Captivation found through pure obsession-----even if brief Movements swift or--unhurried Actions never the less leading down the same path Perhaps Appreciation is always desired And found--through this Mutual respect is essential But occasionally-- Unheard of in the unhealthy relations Spelt out it reveals Logical thoughts left Orchestrated overtures found Viable elasticity needed Ebullience found in those unlikely |
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07-03-03, 07:51 PM
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IP:
Up you go..
Oh, forgot to reply to the piece. Complex, i liked how you used the 'stop-start' style. Very hard to implement, and you did it very well.. ...the ending was a pleasant surprise. Love was in the back of my mind, had other ideas about it before it... ...resp.. Last edited by varentao : 07-03-03 at 07:56 PM. |
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07-04-03, 12:58 AM
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BANNED For Being A Freeposter
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pretty good
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07-04-03, 04:36 AM
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IP:
WOw! i am impressed, amazing amzing vocabulary, You used it so well too, plus the stop-start style that Varentao said, i can't wait to see your next
peace
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07-06-03, 03:31 PM
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IP:
thank uu....lemme up this one more time n see if i can squeeze out more responses lol
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