Im on a BLUNT-HUNT - I need to find some dope
Im on a BLUNT-HUNT - A jay or a toke

Thats Riiiiighhhht , I neeeed some weeeed to fill my APePTiiite
and Im heading out to find some
if I have to steal it , I don't mind none
Cause I crave the dope-hit taste
if I don't get it , I may have to waste
an Unlucky chap // anyone tells me their dry and
I gotta come back // is gonna be SoRRy
One Dealer told me NO // I stripped his FeRRari
With MY BARE HANDS , When Im on a Blunt Hunt
Im as strong as CONAN // No one is SAFE
Til I got a Blunt inbetween my TEETH
Fat as my wrist // thats what I NEED
in order to SUCEED - A DAY
A Blunt , a Forty , a Spread of the LEGS
and Im Chillin , Fuck da penicillin
I don't need it // I smoke weed and I feed it
to my pets / there all stone / just like the rest of my clan
Its 1,2,3,4,5 blunts Rolled Man
And Im stoked Si , gonna get toked G , pull out a philly
and put tit in front of me ... and Light it ( I don't even fight it )
Im on a BLUNT HUNT , I need to find some dope
IM on a BLUNT HUNT , a Jay or a toke

Crazy E did you find some weed ?
Yea , I found it .... Now beat it !!!

Shiznit's Thoughts:

are you kidding bout this piece???...or not.

alright ...here's the thing..it aint nothing wrong with trying ya know..its just sometimes TRY has its own limitations as well...but u gotta somehow figure out if this would be good enough..(here goes my contructive critism )

and yeah i know that this piece was something u called "BLUNT-HUNTT"<---sure does sounds interesting but u said blunt too much...*sigh*

some are really confusing..it doesnt mean that im confused i dont know what ur talking about..its just that how you execute some words...just a bit confusion..i mean u jumped from one idea to another....

"Crazy E did you find some weed ?
Yea , I found it .... Now beat it !!!" <---whats up with this...not that stylish

if you put like more vocabs ..and do something with the flow even if it aint have that much metas and wordplays it would be better

but anyways..dont take my comment the wrong way ya know...just helpin and sayin some shit out

lik i always say:

WE still elevatin..u should join us!

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<br><br><center>- Shiznit -
- Tampons are still expensive -
- That's a Fact - </center>

fuck a constructive criticism, the most constructive thing I can say about this is "try not to kid yourself.. lol".. but ne-way, itwas pretty bad, ^^what he said.. keep elevating. .

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You need a blunt nigga I need one/psyche bitaaaaaattttttttttttccccccccccchhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Hey thanks guys and gals for the advice and insight. I want to clarify that "No , I'm not serious with this shit" , I guess you could call them Rap Parodies , I don't know. I'm trying to get a laugh I guess , more than actually anything important , but Im practicing my battles and not schilling for votes , but I got one going now and could use a few votes ( eitherside ) to end it. Thanks

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