I don't know how to call a battle and this is my first piece I have written ... And I didnt know where to put this at so I put it up in Open Mic...Please tell me wut you think of it, i dont care if its good or bad, just please tell me what i need to improve on ... and if you wanna battle me, message me and I'll go hardcore...Peace


I’ma prove right now I’m the baddest chick
Be known as ‘LiL J’ wit da ma-j-ic clit
Listen to mah rhymes and listen closely you mutha fucka
I’ma rip you so hard, you gonna wanna start fuckin otha brothas!

I called you out, hopin for a battle
I ain’t lookin for a comedy show, I ain’t lookin for a tattle
But shit, this battle was over before it began
I’ll be hearin ya spit rhymes as you try to write as fast as you can

Come on! show me what ya got fo me tonite
Bring yo hottest shit, don’t matter if you black or white
You can take my rhymes, and lyrically disagree
But fucka you the one thas gon be rated wit a 3

I’m sick of all these boys, rappin about their hoes
Rappin about their bitches, rappin about what they don’t know
Fucka I ain’t a bitch, I’m just a fine girl
Tryin to make it, in this big bad world

I ain’t number 2 I’m only number 1
I’m spittin this shit, always havin fun
Now I’m gonna bounce, and listen to yo riddle ryhme
Peace out, I’m done with you, its over, you just a waste of time

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Dealing with backstabbers, there was one thing I learned
They're only powerful when you got your back turned
I yearn for the day I finally meet them again
So I can give them all a taste of their own medicine
¤ 3ast Sid3 ¤

http://hometown.aol.com/jjbootaylicious

This drop was aiight... nothing eye opening. The only line that stood out to me was...

I’m sick of all these boys, rappin about their hoes/
Rappin about their bitches, rappin about what they don’t know/

Other than that, it was average. If you are gonna battle catz in here, you'll need to bring a little more vocab or 90% of the catz in here will chew you up... Peace...

you need to improve but you are not bad.though with the concept of battle is a difficult genre i think you had a nice start but lack the punches required i to am attempting to target a battle market and after years of doing this still lack in several factors.we just keep trying we cann only evolve to better. stay up