Im new tu writing n shit.. so im prob not all dat great but oh well.. I thought Id post somethin i wrote the other day anywaz... tell me what yll think..



::The Meaning Of Life::

Im dripping in fumes
of my own creation
Im drifting into
a world I cant see.

My bodies a mantel
its ashes spread scandel
The pieces stained
with anomosity.

I feel like an angel
cursing the heavens.
I steal my innocence
and give it to theives.

Ive escaped from a dungeon
to peel off my sunburn
But the words people say
still imprison me.

Down a dead end
i walk to find night
When I reach the begining
i search for a light.

A window of poison
circles my skin
A world of beauty
lays ahead of me.

I break away evil
with shadows of you
But when the glass shatters
the sun reviels truth.

Im littered with splinters
a cast sorrounds my eyes
My blood sprinkles vinegar
i taste the meaning of life.

really enjoyed reading this...but i couldnt tell whether there was an intended rhyme scheme or not...nevertheless it was a good piece...great use of imagery...definately a strong way to come out with your first post...lol....look forward to reading more from you...keep dropping...
LP

Naw, I wasnt really focusin anythin on the scheme, I just wanted to spread it out visually, it's da best way to write in my opinion.

Ty for your opinion man.