im about to go to yo town,take u down,a backstreetboy and beat down this new kid on tha block
i'll knock ur flow like pattys old house when doug threw da rock
got u stuck in a closet with no way out i got this fag locked
get off my jock stop actin like u are what ur not u aint stapped like a tube top
i got a chip on ur shoulder and i'll eat it this aint scrambled eggs bitch u better beat it
I get a kick out of leavin wankstas like u defeated
tryin to sneek to catch me wit your wifey but u couldnt get a peak kid
who did u see walkin down the street, it was ur mom & me
my boy was like yo son, thanks 4 passin her on 2 me
shes on a knee but didnt score a touchdown im hittin a homer im the bomb u see
its 2 bad u couldnt make a hundred bucks if u was playin monopoly
if i knocked u down u wouldnt stand up if u where doin comedy
spittin ur pathological fiction will leave u lyin in da street
rymes are a mysteriousely mythological sorry bitch i aint greek
u couldnt catch brains if u was usin a catchers mit, or an outfeilders glove
im never spitn the writtin its from the top im gettin this shit, show me some love

uppin this

good
5/10

Wow..I didn't like this at all..Horrible disses..Maybe you should try something else or just stick to freestyling..That was bad.

^aight thats ur opinion fag boy..uppin !

NAH, SON THIS WAS DESCENT KID. YOU HAD SOME NICE LINES IN THERE THAT WERE CATCHY. WHOEVER YOU WERE DISSIN' SHOULD FEEL THE AFTERMATH OF THIS HOMES. UPPINNN!

that was nice, i even got the doug funny joke but others mite not.

This was aiight... at best. Some OK lines in it, but the format messed it all up for me. I had to read it several times to get where the lines end.

Thanks 4 Tha Critisicm I Appreciate It Uppin 4 More Feedback

NEEDS WORK BUT IS A FOUNDATION TO BUILD TO BETTER NO DOUBT IVE HERD WOARSE KEEP POSTEN

^aight kid thanks