this is like the song off Beyonce and Sean Paul-Baby Boy
well I liked it and its Idea so I decided to make my own version

Chorus:Baby girl she been on my mind,deepest fantasies
She get her laced with the illest rhymes,shit thats really deep
x2

Verse 1:
We first met in the streets while you was walkin by
I took a look, though up some lines, thinkin you would be mine
you was playin hard to get, but then you started to talk
we was headin to the shop together, our love began to start
we been feelin each other from that day on
i can't get you out my mind,thats why i made this song
to show you that my love is always there
and I can't get you out my, thats how much I care
You got that perfect body even haters can't have much to say
you ain't a ho, but you always dress nice,and youlike to get ya way
Summer jams and club hits were made for asses like that
And just the lean on what we could do, when we hit the shack

Chorus:Baby girl she been on my mind,deepest fantasies
She get her laced with the illest rhymes,shit thats really deep
x2

Verse 2:
Now she been on my mind, the games been changed
girls like her, prove i'm in my range
when she leaves i go him, thoughts drivin me insane
but out the bottom of my heart, wouldn't cause you pain
for the death of it, all them other girls to you-is a million dollar deficit
they can't compare, and in my mind I'm lovin the way you move
and your voice on the phone, can make an envy of smooth
the truth and the justice uphold you high
and the best part is, that your all mine
See the thing about you, is you get what you want
If you wanna crash at the crib, then I ain't gon' front
Hell, if you want to go to Florida, I'll try to get dough
Legal or illegal, for you i'll get it yo
We gonna hit the hot spots, i ain't never gonna trip
This is the type of love, I feel we have full grip
And I ain't never lettin go, proves my love is true
I wouldn't let go if both our hands were greased, from chicken on the road

Chorus:Baby girl she been on my mind,deepest fantasies
She get her laced with the illest rhymes,shit thats really deep
x2

Verse 3:
Deepest affections, life's reflections, no contestants
110% real, yet you keep me guessin
bout what I couldve' done, if you wasn't there
or who wouldv'e been takin off ya underwear
I stay lookin in your eyes, and you look me back
I think about the first days I learned how to mack
And how i got this far, in so little time
how i think so much about you, in all of my rhymes
Dedications is deep, streets slangs and terms
mention you and me, and sexual verbs
we passionate about each other i ain't tryin to be
hurtin any of ya feelings, or be a P-I-M-P
you seem to be the only one who seems to know who I am
lookin at you and life, comparisons so grand
Greatest thing about it all,as I dedicate each line
when I look in your eyes, I know that your all mine
and i thank you, because your not the type to twist shit
And pretty soon, its your you name after a Mrs.

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Only God can judge me, Who THE FUCK IS YOU?!

uppin

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Nice verse man, really couldn't find a bad line on it...It was all kept simple and easy to follow...8/10

can ya check my verse out
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=65833

Very good flow man...keep it up