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Old 07-23-03, 12:18 PM   #1
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This is a song, I put together for my daughter when here Mom and I broke up, it was a reminder of my love for her, no matter what. It reads kind of like a poem, so I decided to post. Thanks ahead of time for your time and comments...

“PRECIOUS LADY”

Destinie you’re always so kind
Young and innocent, sweet and divine
May your smile shine forever
And you’ll always be mine
Your Daddy’s love
Is expressed, here in this rhyme
Mija don’t you worry
Everything will be fine

Destinie
My love will guide and carry you
Till the end of time
The lessons that I teach
Will sharpen your mind
The inspiration that I preach
Will keep you out of bind

Destinie
Listen to your father
And just open your mind

Hold back them tears
And put away your fears
Daddy will always
And forever be near
From you I promise
I will never steer clear
Guide and protect you
You know I’ll always be here

Your Daddy’s love is here to stay
On my knees for your happiness,
I do pray
With every single smile,
You brighten up my day
I will never forget the times
When we laugh and play


Destinie
My precious lady did I tell you
That I love you today?
Even when you’re bad
You know I love you anyway
Destinie
No matter what happens
I’m going to love you anyway


Destinie
My precious lady did I tell you,
That I love you today?
Even when you’re bad
You know I love you anyway

I never knew happiness
Until the day we had you
When you came into my life
A promise I made you
Looked into you eyes,
Hypnotized by you
As a new father,
I didn’t know what to do
Provide, guide and strengthen
Is what I had to do

Destinie
Your father will always,
be in love with you
Little girl you make me proud
With each and everything you do
My love will forever guide,
And direct you too
Remember all the lessons
That your father taught you
I know you love me,
And you know I love you
Put your mind to it,
And nothing will ever stop you

Destinie
I’m your father and I wrote this for you
May your life be forever blessed
And your heart forever true
Little girl don’t you know
Your Dad’s in love with you….

By: Bouncedoggydog inspired by Destinie Blanca Hernandez (My Daughter now age 7)

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Old 07-23-03, 03:05 PM   #2
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this was very nice...
very touching.
good flow, and a lot of feeling into the song

keep writing straight from the heart

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Old 07-23-03, 06:48 PM   #3
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Thanks for the reply split-eyez, I will keep the emotion in my work, as long as there is emotion in me.

Peace out...
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Old 07-23-03, 08:51 PM   #4
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This was so damn nice!

So sweet, smooth and flowing. With a simplicity that brought out such quaint beauty and streaming emotions.

...no criticism. Very nice piece bounce..

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Old 07-23-03, 10:03 PM   #5
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Good Stuff

I enjoyed reading it

full of emotion which i loved to read it has inspired me to put more thought and emotion into thhe things i write now so thanks for that Bounce

Peace Out!
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Old 07-23-03, 11:22 PM   #6
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damn dawg u got the emotion in u and u can really tell u love your daughter alot brings the true person out of u
and that wad just excellent really enjoyed that it was real good
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Old 07-24-03, 03:39 AM   #7
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Thank you all for your comments, I really appreciate all the great reply's.

Varentao I really admire and respect your work, so it's nice to hear you dropping reply's on mine, I take your critic very seriously. It all about elevating so any advice you offer, I am always more than willing to consider....

Disaster thanks for the comment, and I was blown away over that insperation part. I never heard that before, thanx


JKO good looking out dawg, and yes your right, my daughter is my life. I would be lost without her, she's my best friend and collaberator. We rap together, write together and have a great relationship...
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Old 07-24-03, 07:04 PM   #8
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Beautiful Name Doggy..If I Have A Girl
Id Like Her To Be Named Kaylie You
Touched On A Lot And With You Having
The Gift To Put Your Thoughts On Paper
And Express Yourself You MightBring To
Life Some Artistic Aspects From Her Forreal

Other Than Everything Ive Stated It Was Simple
But It Realy Didnt Need To Be Compex Because
It Was Real And Respectable Holla Back Peace
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Old 07-24-03, 11:42 PM   #9
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Thanks content, I gave her that name, Mom wanted to name her, some standard name. Kaylie is a very nice name, I wish you luck in the parent department, just take your time. Plan your child out, and just be real. Respect for the comments, stay up...
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Old 07-25-03, 02:02 AM   #10
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Yo Bounce that was nice man really well written and very easy to follow. Thats real cool that u care about your daughter that much, much respect to you for that. Much love for this poem man really much love. I like your writing style a lot keep writin man. Check my poem called war cry.
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Old 07-25-03, 11:06 AM   #11
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Thanks for your comments, I really do appreciate your feedback. It's nice to come across a young man that appreciates detail such as yourself, and really has a respect for a parental relationship. Kepp your head on str8, and stay up......Much respect...

I'll check your's now...
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Old 07-25-03, 01:11 PM   #12
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Yo, man...

Very good spit...

I got a baby girl of my own so I know where ya comin from...

Keep spittin, man...

And lovin ya girl.

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Old 07-26-03, 07:51 PM   #13
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Thanks for taking the time to read it. I'll keep spitiing if ya'll keep reading...

Good looking out everyone, I appreaciate your insight,,

Respect....
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Old 07-27-03, 02:02 AM   #14
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wow....surprising how much just a little one can inspire you..but they are beautiful arent they. I liked this.....one of the most heartfelt pieces i've read in a while...God bless.1..
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Old 07-30-03, 01:09 AM   #15
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bounce im liking ur work this was a hell of a drop very good n tuching keep it from the heart hell of a job keep spittin n elevating
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