Scared of the new, scared of the old
wishing once again you had her 2 hold
wishing good thing 4 u would unfold
never feeling happy always thinken cold
thinkin " man why cant i ever do as told,
always gotta b the tuff one step up & be bold"

wishing the good would come back
when something happy is what u lack
feeling as punctured by a tack
running from home not thinken to pack
the stupidness you show and run
thinken lifes all good and all fun
when someday u gotta grow up 2 have a son

you regret the violence and all the drugs
wishing u woulda taken ur moms offerd hugs

Need some people to check this
out and tell me what u think.

i like this piece a little its simple and hs its message well shown but its simplicity was a little too overwhelming for me overall chill but a little on the ehhhh side, 1luv.

hit diss yall

tell me what u think people

well, not bad but it was kinda sloppy. a bit slow. but I do that too.
I like the style and it felt to me like it wasn't really a liked poem as I read it. it just seemed a bit used up. thats me though man I 'm new so what ever. but it wasn't bad. keep it up.

tell me what u think people

iit was good but u need to add more to it ur point is clearly stated but add more to it thas wha brings it down other wise nice work