Broken Heart, Broken Soul, Broken Man...
I Cant Live Without You But I'll Do The Best I Can...

The Night Before You Left Told Me You Loved Me...
Even Whispered It In My Ear When You Hugged Me...
How Could You Leave Me Like This, I Never Felt Like This...
I Never Thought I'd See The Day When I Had To Write This...
You Stood There And Told Me With The Tears Rollin Down Your Cheek...
I Sat Praying That I Would Die In My Sleep I Began To Count Sheep...

Afraid To Wake Up, Wishing We Could Make-up.. Why Did We Ever Break Up?

Anger Blinded Me, I'm Cutting You Out All Our Pictures...
Hearts Broken, Requires More Than Just Ordinary Stitches...
Thought We Were Inseperable You Never Showed A Sign...
Perhaps The Saying Is True........... Love IS Blind...
I Miss You Eyes, Your Lips And Your Soft Touch...
So Sad Cause Nowadays We Dont Talk As Much...
My Influence, My Personal Goddess Of Love...
I Figured My Love Alone Just Wasnt Enough...
You Found A Better Option, A Higher Road To Take...
I Dreaded Hearing Those Words Let's Take A Break...
I Hear The Rain, The Tears Begin To Fall...
Can't Breathe, Backs Up Against The Wall...
Starin' At The Phone, Wating For The Call...
I Never Wanted It To End Like This At All...

Afraid To Wake Up, Wishing We Could Make-up.. Why Did We Ever Break Up?

Sitting Alone, Watch My Soul Mate Disappear Over The Horizon...
Sulk My Way Back Home, Look Around But No One Is Sympathizin...
No-One Understands My Complications, But She Used To...
I Kept My Obligation, Just Like She Used To Too...
Cross Another Girl Off, Add Her To The List...
Sorry To See You Go Girl You Will Be Missed...

Broken Heart, Broken Soul, Broken Man...
I Cant Live Without You But I'll Do The Best I Can...



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I Gotta Say Man...Thats Some a The Best Shit You Ever Wrote...Hits Ya Like Fuck...Deep Emotion Felt Shit...Fucken Murder This Love Shit haha...Dizzope...This Line Was A Fucken Standout...Top Shelf Shit....

How Could You Leave Me Like This, I Never Felt Like This...
I Never Thought I'd See The Day When I Had To Write This...

Fizzuk!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^^That Ish There Was Hard For Real^^..Dope Shit Mun..

..............Pz.................

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Rhyming/Flow
The Flow Was Of Da Chain Dawg! You Had Mad Multi's IN there, Not one Bar Didn't Rhyme With Last Or the One In Front! ...9/10

Vocab/Wordplay
The VOcab Was Lacking, It COuld've Been More Complex BUt Your Wordplay Was Mad As Fuck Dawg, "I Hear The Rain, The Tears Begin To Fall..." - More Like That...7/10

Concept/Topic
Didn't Fall Off, I Was Feelin' You Dawg. You Succeded In Showing Us Your Meaning n' Bring Out The Emotion in This Piece...9/10

Overall
9/10 - Expanded Vocab Was The ONly Thing Lacking, But Your Succeded IN Everything Else, Was Brutal Dawg!

Word!

Damn, lol.......I just wrote like the same thing..........haha.....
THis was deep though.......I know what youre going through dawg. Just Keep your head up.

Every COncept of this was excellent...i followed you through the whole thing. Im sorry for what happened. I hope everything works out for you.

Best Of Luck...
You Got All My Love Dawg.....

that was tight as hell, everything was good, i dont understand when ppl say u need to be more complex in ur wordplay cuz ppl say it to me but u took the time to write somethen that was great and i respect that, good luck with everything else u write

^ I said Vocab ^

ook sorry man my bad they still say the same shit to me lol, it was still very well written

lol... Thanks For The Replies... I Will Do My Best To Reply To Your Open Mics When I Get Home Today... pz

I Replied To Slik And Rythmic... Couldnt See One From lil_ballin_boy...


...pz...