hey...i set up u spit first(u put ur rap down first)

10-20 lines max
5 k.o.
no hate
no crea
no dr
none of da shit
u kno how to do right?
u spit first.....

comon corey hurry uppp.............................................. .......
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Im not 50 cent im not Eminem but I know this girl and shes really kicken, I talk to her online because im not a big fat chicken, I got up the nerve to ask her out, she might turn me down and I might have to pout, maybe if she got to know me better we'll go out its 4 a good reason but dont worry I dont have no doubt, Imma player pimp, im the one the chix get, the hover over me like flys on crap, Broken hearts no broken bones treat em good u get all those hoes, Pay em good they come back, Daymn im rite on track, Im the finest Pimp u'll ever meet, Hey my names Corey im ur ltl treat, kiss me once kiss me twice kiss me 3 times we'll have a fun nite, come on bitch u knowu know its true, dont be shy holla back u know u want to

one thing befo Lil spits dat shit was allll outta order
i didnt know where the hell i was fucking readin half the damn time u need betta flow and u need betta structure

man yo rap is 7 days equal to 1 WHOLE WEAK//
u need to giv up ur rappin career , so shutup up n lemme speak//
u pre-wrote that rhyme its in ur AIM info//
u sed ur gonna kick my ass but honestly boy, who knows?//
u could flip that round lyk the horse start ridin the rider//
when i walk throo the room n spit dat shit guys be yellin 'FIRREEE'//
u know i got ya beat more than that child abuse hotline//
boy ur goin down this one belongs to me, its all mine//
i cut you more than i cut that bread loaf yesterday//
this battles mine bitch we goin alllll daaaa wayyyy//

haha CAN U SAY MERKED BY A FEMCEE MERKED
FLOW+PUNCHS+STRUCTURE=LISA man

u need to get personal in ur shit

u need 2 shut the fuck up asshole mother fucker U ASS HOLE MOTHER FUCKER THIS SHIT SUCKS ASS ANYWAY!

I wasn't sure if your drop was a battle rap or a love letter Buttiekicka, you should definitely try throwing some punches in there, not just talking about random non-battle related stuff. Lisa actually threw some punches, some of which were right on target, others weren't as hard.

lisa took this....buttie...don't do ur verse in paragraph form...divide it into barz...it flows better...u had some ok rhymes...but lisa had better punches...and a little bit more of a complex vocabulary....

peace
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hahaha Lil Lisa 420 merked tha shit out of love letter writin' Buttie u need to throw punches dogg
Vote-Lil Lisa 420

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Prime effort is all you can expect.
Perfection will be promised in time.

The Creation

buttie...... well thats basically what your rhymes were vote lisa
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u guys....if im so good fuckin vote for me!! lol

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Vote`lisa.....nice punches and shit.......*1*
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